faerybeki

Jul 02, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Life Patterns (the circle)

                     S o m e
               u n  d             t
           o                i           i
        r                      n          m
                   s                          e
       s        e               c          s
        e          l           i          L
          o         c     r            i
            g                         f
                   t s u j       e

— faerybeki, Jul 02, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Beki,

I love this! I am such a fan of concrete poetry! Sadly, it doesn't always look the way one wants it to look if it is posted, and getting it to look even remotely the way one wanted it is a challenge in word... I have a friend who did a whole book of these poems, but I cannot remember for the life of me how she made all her ideas work, I only remember that it was much work... Yours, ~Nina

faerybeki

17 years ago

Thanks Nina x

I'm having more and more of my poems 'visit' me in a distinct shape, I'm finding it quite fun, I zoned out playing with the letters and shape of this one, I'm happy you found it effective :) it was most enjoyable to write and ironically it distracted me from thinking how depressing it is to go round in circles and keep relearning lessons lol. Much love Beki xx

Kailashana

17 years ago

Me too. Forgot all about

Me too. Forgot all about them. Will have to see what remains in my tortured files that ended up in the cosmic circular file. Love it. Beki. And I know it isn't easy to format. Hugs, Anna "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin

faerybeki

17 years ago

Anna, happy you enjoyed and

Anna, happy you enjoyed and appreciate your presence here, would love to see some of your own concrete poetry (new term for me, i've always refered to them as shape poems, constantly learning here at Neo:)). It was fiddly but much fun :) much love and hugs back Beki xx

Seren

17 years ago

Beki

Its hard to get it to format right I have been experimenting with one poem for about two months LOL trying to get it to a certain shape, my hats off again for this ones awesome huni .. loved it Jayne x x

faerybeki

17 years ago

Lol keep at it :) x

Thank you Jayne :) It was a fun little piece and expresses where i am at the moment. Hope you're ok babe and getting what you need :) much love Beki xx

weirdelf

17 years ago

I love concrete poetry too,

the difficulties are great, formatting gets lost everywhere, PDF's help but you can't post them here. Also love art with text. I immediately thought of the Harry Chapin song "My life is like a circle, turns from day to day..." Also you touched on one of my favourite concepts- the ideological constructs of time, don't get me started. Read "Pip Pip" by Jay Griffiths Cheers, Jess

faerybeki

17 years ago

Happy you enjoyed Jess, I

Happy you enjoyed Jess, I played with the poem in Notepad lol but it was elongated in transfer, far more oval than the hexagonal, circle inferring thing it is now lol so I mostly messed about with it directly on posting page, as I've said I found it quite meditative. Jay Griffiths sounds very interseting (I perused her website) thanks for the pointer I may investigate further. Thanks for stopping here Jess, much love Beki x

Wafi

17 years ago

I Like This Too

I like this too, Beki. The shape made the content special. This reminded me of one of my habits. I keep drawing so many unvisible circles on table, ground, or anything near me, with the tip of my finger,just like the shape in this poem, when I am thinking about something. Enjoyed this circle too. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

faerybeki

17 years ago

Manena Wafi, much healthier

Manena Wafi, much healthier to draw invisible circles than to smoke cigs(I must give up!) but we all have habits I suppose lol. I'm happy you enjoyed, hoping you're well Wafi, been meaning to check your latest posts, catch up with you soon, much love Beki xx

professor

17 years ago

You and your shapes Beki lol

To me your circle by moving inwards at the end becomes a spiral so may be i might have had "sometimes life just goes round in circles" around the the circumference and then spiralled down into the centre saying "sometimes it just spirals" ...You look oh so comfortable and affectionate with that lucky tree by the way lol. Love K

faerybeki

17 years ago

Me and my shapes Keith :)

Me and my shapes Keith :) lol, happy you found it worth stopping for, interesting idea to enlarge the circle and add new spiralling line inside (because sometimes it does!), will give it some thought. Thanks Keith, much love Beki xx Ps It's a euclyptus in some gorgeous RHS gardens we visited on holiday, I couldn't help but think of Anni when I hugged it :) Hope you're well Keith , must check what you've been up to, more love b xx

orgami

17 years ago

i like the hexogonal shape

reminds me of honeycomb of the honeybee whom goes round and round in their dances and like life like a metal scooter I found for Ataya the back tire is flattned on one spot from the brake probably going downhill so it goes Thump every time it goes round i like your poem its refreshing and fun

faerybeki

17 years ago

Thank you Orgami, happy you

Thank you Orgami, happy you found the poem fun and refreshing, I enjoyed the process of playing with the letters, putting them into this shape (as near round as I could make it) it was, as I've said, quite meditative. Thanks again for sharing here O, much love Beki x

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