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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jul 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

THE SWEET CHEAT'S GONE (title from Proust)

The sweet cheat's gone He's  run awayI cannot hold on for another daywhy is this the unvanquished onethe moving stars,  the rising sun? Winning him back into my armsI have depleted all of my charmsI would have him be more than I amI would give him my life, my soul as planned. This disparity of lovespeaks more of despairit tells of two -one of whom doesn't care This inequality of lovespeaks nary* of fairit hints at  pathology's overwhelming needsa will that beckons,
 a heart that bleeds....




BjR July 2 '09

*archaic form of 'never'
— Bonitaj, Jul 02, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Boni

I really liked this one but you lost me at the end ... I will have a look at it later and see what I cant come up with, the first 3/4's are awesome just the last few lines? lost its rhythm for me ... Hugz Sorry my comments are few and far between but I will be ok in a day or two fingers crossed Love Jayne x x