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The Night's Talons

  The night's Talons 

 

The night sinks its talons into the day

and draws blood, red along its horizons

from there rise grey black clouds

ominously potent in their smoke

the sound of thunder, sight of light 

eclipsed

 

so full of power sets our imagination

our memories on fire as this great

bedspread in the sky shuts out the day

profound, omnipotent like God

our senses now reduced to thoughts

we feel the ground beneath, our souls

creep out from their deep sleeping places 

 

and with ghosts our conscious minds

floating about in sounds, the peopled darkness

clicks and shakes, as birds move on their roosts

the branches fallen on the path 

make cracks so sharp they echo back

the trees they whisper in the breeze 

of nights like these from long ago

night moths make spectres buff and grey and send

their messages another way

 

from ours in rosy bowers

of nights cool flowers sup honeyed dreams, 

not ours the cats set up their opera songs of love 

in deep dark night

waking us up from sleep

the owl hoots and glides past, no sound, unseen, 

moving the air on your cheek as his wings brush by

 

his mysterious flight a mouse squeaks and is eaten

the houses now like Christmas cards set up their fairy lights

with people moving round about in the dance of life like dice

with one hot drink to bed they sink into a stupor deep

now black still bubble and quietly glide

towards the never ending sea that joins the sky at last

infinity the void of space where stars make points of light

 

foxes roam while we're at home and dogs create a fuss

badgers waddle out of holes their sharp teeth snapping food

while in the sky the acrobats those bats that fly like papers black 

now cleared of cloud, abide a host that's always 

there the intangible black velvet gown of night 

that frowns it darkness down on hill and town

and all we know is covered out of sight.



— Nordic cloud, Jul 02, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Long ago, when I first

Long ago, when I first joined Neo, I said I wouldn't vote, as I am not an academic in the art of poetry; however so much is art, I'm tempted. Especially this one. I'll be bookmarking this to return when I am night-lonely. Brilliant, romantic verdant poetry. Much love, much gratitude. ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 11 months ago

Like a journey to Enchantment...

Your Poem creates pictures in my Mind's Eye; of Mystery and Wonder! Of Nights of Enchantment...in other places, in other times perhaps... And right here. I felt like I was on a Magickal journey, with you as my guide. Very hypnotic... and beautiful. Raven
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 11 months ago

Oh Hello you black bird

How lovely for me to transport you, when you already have wings to fly into the night's woods and discover for yourself the enchanted atmosphere, I love to be able to take someone's hand and lead them into places they have never been, or seen from my angle. Thank you for coming with me Raven. Yours Ann of Norway
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Ann,

how beautifully your pen drips pictures of the night... Awesome imagery, as always! And yet... I still have an inkling this might get even better. Sorry for not giving you anything concrete to work from, it's simply too late right now. I will return and make suggestions. Much love, dear poetess, ~Nina
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 11 months ago

You are absolutely right Nina

I didn't think this one a finished article, it needs? And you saw that straight away, yes I should perhaps have worked on it a bit more before posting it, but we are hear to learn too so that's good. Thank you discerning one. Don't fret time is, as far as I know!!! on my side, no hurry as my father said, i told you too, "Hurry slowly" its almost every day I think of this. You must have your sleep too, you younger people who work with so many different things need that very much; oh how blissful it is not to 'have to' work for one's living, what freedom, it frees the mind too and writing can be untrummeled and exciting, you saw my recipe to Chuck? My love to you dear Nina from Ann of Norway
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bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Margaret Ann,

I am humming and hawing. The first two stanza's really had me going. Then I started to have a sense that the poem was wandering. I try to see it through your eyes, for there is that love of the natural world you have. You cuddled up to it almost with each breath. So I thought of Genesis for a time. It is there that our culture formally turns over the keys of nature to humans - something which has turned out to be an unfortunate concept. And you make something of the contra argument without ever mentioning Genesis. The mix of "Divine" stanzas and "Animal" stanzas leave the people, who we conceive of as kind of in the middle (and us), distant, like the lights in the postcard houses. There are great lines in this poem which lick a place of promise and which disappear with the night. For example: "our memories on fire as this great/ bedspread in the sky shuts out the day". And: "night sinks its talons into the day/ and draws blood, red along its horizons". And further: "with people moving round about in the dance of life like dice". In the end the theme seems hanging: we haven't given in to the Divine, humans or even to the animal world; there has just been a jumbling of the usual order of importance, and any implications we must draw on our own. That's ok but you seemed to tickle us with notions of more. Brian
ID

Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Ann,

I think I can now put my finger on it: Your descriptions wander back and forth between the night sky, nature and animals, and human homes and sleep. I'd suggest to rearrange this poem as follows: stanza 1: description of night sky, stanza 2: descripiton of nature (your beautiful tree lines, for instance), stanza 3: night creatures (owl, cats, fox, badgers, bats), stanza 4: human houses, human sleep. Let me know what you think of my suggestions, dear Ann. Yours, ~Nina
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 11 months ago

I will

Dear Nina i think i must wiat until I am able to print this out so that I can see the whole thing and this I cannot do here as I have no printer. I agree with you but I don't know whether I shall be master of the changing, we shall see!!! Thank you Nina for your encouragement and suggestions love from Ann of Norway
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Ann

There isnt a thing I would change of this Ann its just breathtaking I love the night and these words spoke to my soul our memories on fire as this great bedspread in the sky shuts out the day profound, omnipotent like God our senses now reduced to thoughts we feel the ground beneath, our souls creep out from their deep sleeping places their deep sleeping places how wonderful are those words .... I loved this cannot express it enough ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

im in awe

How the hell I missed this one, I do not know! Wonderful.