The Trojan War

" I see words as diamonds in the rough; having potential to be used or discarded at the poet’s whim I see vocabulary as the first cut of these rough diamonds, where the exposed quality of some may be cherished I see language as the final cut and polish of these stones I am convinced that poetry is the creation of the necklace by the skill of the poet Unfortunately most of what I have read so far does not go beyond the clever use of vocabulary " And while we have a decent stab at a gross presentation of meter here, it would obviously scan better as spoken word as inconsistencies in the presentation must need be smoothed by the author who, I do not doubt, would cringe at the renditions of others to this piece. I admit I would have ignored this submission had not the author made such a broad statement about the work of others. That statement is the quote with which I began this comment, for those needing the reference. My questions to the author concerning the dichotomy of his stance and his own presented work have gone unanswered so I am left to conclude the stance is motivated from envy at best and raging jealously at worst for when I compare the structure and style and content of this and other works represented as humourous to other poetry in the same genre, the do not come off the better. The issue, to me, is not that this author has shat on the floor and called it art, the issue is that he has shat on the floor and presented it as a standard which no other poet can attain. But then, I am a cantankerous old man who looks at arrogance and attacks it, so we all must run my position and comments through that filter. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

As in the position you take. It's one of those clever uses of vocabulary. You should get one. And no, I do not find your verses amusing but that's just me and not an indictment of your work. The indictment of your work is the arrogant manner in which you dismiss the efforts of others and then show elementary, at best, skill at what you present as your area of competence. But at least you can feel slighted and superior without ever having presented anything worthwhile. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

Just a quick note. Ian and I had a misunderstanding. Ian made some bold points in a blog post and I misunderstood the thrust of his argument. I inaccurately connected his statements about poetry with an attitude that his own work was superior to the work of others. Words were exchanged, feelings got heated. Ian and I have come to an understanding. I was hasty in concluding Ian's blog post was a judgment of other work in relation to his. The fault was mine. As by way of explanation, not an excuse for the fault was mine, I have a short fuse when I perceive arrogant behaviour. My initial communication to Ian could have been more tempered, his response to me could have been so as well, but at the heart of the issue was my invalid conclusion as indicated above. On this piece. Yes, it could use some work. Perhaps Ian will take feedback on his other submissions and review this piece and modify it. One of the filters we need to apply here is the intended audience, which I understand is younger girls, specifically his granddaughters. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

johnathan you are stupid. thats all i can say about your comments. wow.