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Reminiscences

The clouds form pictures in 3D again
and images of happy days they bring



There used to be no need to point back then
our hands entwined, I needed no prompting
when you said softly See the dragon there?

and when I whispered Over there, a whale!
you spotted it and never asked me Where?

Those beloved shadows, like a faded tale
now rise, love and friendship surface once more

The fun we had, each moment was a lark
just you and I in on the joke, our lore
like artfully painting walls in the dark

on the spot rhyming and nonsense we talked
puns that puzzled the uninitiated

beyond communication our words had walked
through looks and winks, crucial things were stated

We challenged fate with a defiant gaze
and put life’s labyrinthine course to shame
till we got lost in a mascara maze
did your hand slip from mine, was I to blame?


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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

I Love The...

references to the cloud images. I often watch the skies for a glimpse of the changing images and it always brings a smile to my face. In your poem, not only the images move on but the relationship does too. I can find no fault with this piece. Lovely and just a bit sad... Always, Cat
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Cat,

you nailed it: "not only the images move, but the relationship, too". Thank you for understanding. Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Spectactular Nina I loved it

Spectactular Nina I loved it and I just loved the flow and gentle pace of this one ... it was relaxing to read to be honest ... Much Love Jayne x
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Jayne,

so glad you remarked on the flow :) I tried hard to make it work. Yours, ~Nina
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barbsdad2003

16 years 10 months ago

Cat ...

and Jayne have hit the nails on their heads. I like. Thanx much, Chuck
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Gerry

16 years 10 months ago

Two lives happily

Two lives happily synchronized and then a sense of loss! The words of this poem are well chosen. Read this aloud and see how lovely it sounds! Gerry
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Gerry,

thank you for your praise. Glad it sounds "lovely"! Yours, ~Nina
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Ashes4now

16 years 10 months ago

hi

thank you for your comment. I really enjoyed this poem. It made me think of my teenaged years...that's odd for I hardly think about them. Sensational poem. Sincerely, Ash D.M.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Ash,

that's funny, as I met this person when we both had just finished school and we have been best friends for another 10 years after that, so in a way, the people in this poem ARE teenagers. Yours, ~Nina
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

This piece is rivetting!

THe theme, the imagery, the conclusion ... stunning. Just two changes perhaps - 1) Yes the title... and 2) the mascara maze thing lost me abit. was it about 'tears' mascara running? But BOY! What a photo finish! Brilliant. Would love to know more about the title by Goethe. Is there an English translation out? Oder gibt mir doch die Deutsche Namen bitte! Thanks Nina! You're a true craftsman! Boni
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Boni,

yes, that mascara maze thing is mascara running, in other words: crying. I cannot take this one out, as my first poem to my lost friend is called "Mascara Maze", but I promise to think of a better title and to post the Goethe quote. Thanks for the read, much appreciated! Yours, ~Nina
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Goethe's words:

"Ihr bringt mit euch die Bilder froher Tage, Und manche lieben Schatten steigen auf; Gleich einer alten, halbverklungnen Sage Kommt erste Lieb und Freundschaft mit herauf; Der Schmerz wird neu, es wiederholt die Klage Des Lebens labyrinthisch irren Lauf(.)" (from the dedication of the play "Faust") Translation: "Images of happy days you bring, And many beloved shadows rise; Like an ancient, half-forgotten tale First love and friendship surface again; A pain renewed, a lament repeating Life's labyrinthine crazy course(.)"
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you for this Nina!

Would you believe I've only stumbled on it 6 months later!!! SHocking! Do appreciate it though and thought you should know! lol Boni