The Longest Goodbye

At the bitterest of memories
seeping tears rolled to unfurl
trickling among the salty warmth
sorrow and shame was being born

Birthed in these tears
a sad story to be told
rewinding back some years
I shiver in the cold

Tentacles of fear
crawling in my mind
equilibrium in turmoil
thought just wont align

Melting into deep breathes
my soul did start to calm
bringing back to free thoughts
my mind from a maelstrom

Silently it creeps, through the curtains in my mind
three days tired and hurting,this no will of mine
defiled and ripped with dry sobs,in body and in soul
a girl forever lost, his serrated knife did hold

Struggled up to life, through rasping shaken heaves
a man brought beautified love, it starts a road to feel
memories come to haunt, a shattered pandora's mind
many a night was haunted in this horror-ed time

Years went on apace, a heart did start to mend
when in Epiphany, a soul was gifted to be sent

As pride hung low,in this shame defiled
as eyes wouldn't reach up, for the sky
I was stripped of honor ,for his delight
he did make my life, the longest of goodbye's

— Seren, Jul 01, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Longest Goodbye

What Ho, Do I see? More rhymes, and not from me! Only thing I might comment upon, [it be strange to me!] I cannot fathom the thought, of bitterest golden honey. Yours, in rhyme. Gee

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Good catch Gee

Thank you it was meant to read Memories I have No idea why I wrote honey lol ... So thank you makes much more sense, I aint real well at the moment off to bed to try and get some rest (hugz) thanks for the read ... and what ho you do see rhyme for they be divine though mine arent as smooth as your lines ;) much Love Jayne x

Baz

16 years 11 months ago

The Longest Goodnye

Hi Jayne When I read the posted poems I read the poem first then I look at the name of the author. It seems that I am drawn to much of your work, I sure as hell can relate to some of the feelings you express. I cannot remember if you have read the poem below, (Old man now). I consider it to be my best, (Does not say a lot about the rest of my work!). Regards Barry Insidious Creeping Affliction Her sweet smile she demonstrated my heart; my soul was captivated. Warmth radiated from her face my heart beat fast, my pulse did race. Small laughter lines around her eyes brought from me ten thousand sighs. Shoulders back upright her walk I lost my voice; I couldn’t talk, I tried to speak but could only mumble all my words an incoherent jumble. Then she flashed that smile again this image seared upon my brain. When she turned to smile at me my knees were shaking apprehensively. Passion ignited within my chest by her smile, with which I was blessed. I felt her smile wash over me like a river flowing to the sea Now that smile has gone away I no longer see it every day. Replaced by a frown, by a scowl my heart lets out a silent howl. In pain and torture it is rent her smile, I know not where it went. When did it go? I can’t quite recall but I know the culprit. It was alcohol. An insidious, creeping, consuming affliction, her life now is governed by this addiction. Obeisance and homage she does pay to alcohol each and every day. No longer is there any sweet romance it’s replaced by anger; abuse, and by violence. It pains to watch her life degenerate as this disease it does accelerate I pray for her release; for her to be free and for her smile, once more returned to me.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Baz

Thank you so much for the comment,I dont think I have read that piece but will have a good look when I am feeling better .. Regards Jayne

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

To be honest, I am almost speechless at the undercurrent of pain and anguish to be found here. I hope that you are resting or better yet, sleeping as I write this. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Cat hugz ..

This was the hardest poem I have ever writen it hasnt even been edited just thought I would submit it and work on it from here ... I have been resting will try and catch you when I am awake Much love Jayne x x