Moondancer

Come to me my Moondancer

Bathed in all your white splendor

Come to me, oh Moondancer,

Come to my door and I shall surrender

Surrender to what you have to offer

Shelter from all that burns deep inside

Cover from those that seek to do harm

Save, yes sweetly safe under the shelter of your arm

Come to me, my Moondancer

Awash with all your vibrance

Come to me oh Moondancer

Smother me with all your eternal brilliance

Smother me in your love

The one thing that holds me sane

Keeps me together, like and invisible rope

It’s better than all that medically given dope

Come to me, my Moondancer

For I am your ever willing star

Come to me oh Moondancer

Even when you lead me way to far

For this journey, making two one

You and I are never far apart

For this I constantly thank you

Oh Moondancer, for its thanks to you I have come this far

— Feebie, Jun 29, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Gauteng, ZMB

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Robert Frost

Critiques

Lonnie

16 years 11 months ago

I like the Premise here!

It seems we've all danced with our own "Moondancer" now and then! Sometimes, it's hard to tell whether you're dancing, or just going through the motions! Good poem, but it could use some "Punch"!

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

poem was enchanting and spell-weaving. I have Only a couple of suggestions: In this line: Keeps me together, like and invisible rope The line should be: Keeps me together, like (an) invisible rope and I felt that this line was poor and took away from the piece: It’s better than all that medically given dope How about rewriting the line to end in "hope?" Always, Cat

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