Candlewitch

Jun 28, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Dark Valentine

Covertly watching her life's dance

The music born of her personal rhythm

Touched him like none had ever before.

The weaving of her spell drew him

From the depth of his essence while

Inherent passion caressed his spirit.

Yearning awakened, festering to obsession,

Overtaking all he once knew of sanity.

She became a tortuous fixation,

Gradually ripping apart his psyche,

Disassembling his sense of reality.

To possess her in this leaden adoration

Would be to bind her cruelly.

Deciding in a moment of purest affection,

He would deny the raging of his hunger

And simply walk on by...

— Candlewitch, Jun 28, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

Seren

17 years ago

Cat

You saucy wench LOL ... I love this one reowwwwwwwwwwwwww LOL ... love you Jayne ... btw he should give in and not walk by he has no idea what hes missing lol ;)

Candlewitch

17 years ago

LOL!

Thanks Jayne, for always being there! If he stayed, he would just mess it up, lol! Love, Cat

Seren

17 years ago

.... ok i had to say this but ... Dont they always mess it up? lmao he he I am naughty tonight maybe I should go to bed LOL ... Much love big hugs Jayne this poem is even better the second time round its really brillant Cat ... I love it

Bert Lamrick

17 years ago

He'll be back

You've really created a palpable sense of urgency here, Cat. Very descriptive visuals. I really enjoyed this piece of art. Love, ~Rick

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Hi Rick

I feel so honored that you read my poem, thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your comments. Love, Cat

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

Nice, Cat.

Edge love poem... isn't that an oxymoron? =) Loved the darkness in this one. Do we get a sequel? ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Flying so high, trying to remember How many cigarettes did I bring along? When I get down, I'll jump in a taxi-cab Driving through London-town to cry you a song..." - Jethro Tull

Candlewitch

17 years ago

A sequel?

I don't know about that one... but one never knows what Edge is going to do next, not even me, LOL! I'll think about it for awhile and stew my brains. Thanks, Jess! Always, Cat

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Hi Kelsey

I have "Edge" in chains in my basement and he will never stop writing, so have no fear of that. I removed the offending comma as I decided it read better without it, just as you suggested. Thank you for telling me which lines worked for you. I appreciate it. Always, Cat

themoonman

17 years ago

Edge...

walking on by... must've been a tortuous moment for sure! loved the images you planted in me with this, and the ending was absolutely great... didn't see that coming at all... Richard

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Thanks Richard!

I'm glad that you appreciated the ending, that was the first thing my husband commented on when I let him read the finished work. He was pleasantly surprised too. Thanks for reading and commenting! Hugs, Cat

Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Cat,

I love this, it is not only dark and powerful but also thoroughly crafted. Tell Edge to keep them coming... Yours, ~Nina

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Sometimes I Think People Are Tired Of Edge

And then along comes someone like you to let me know it isn't so! Thanks so much for letting me know you like my dark side. Edge has a book coming out at the end of July, titled, "Book of Styx" by Eddy Styx (Eddy Styx is one of the names I publish under)The publisher is Sam's Dot Publishing. I'll let you know when it is released. Always, Cat

Electric Blue

17 years ago

Dark Valentine

Cat So sensious tempting strong willed. He would be disappointed She using all her charms to seduce him. Drawing him in gently to the point he has to decide whether to give in or hold fast. He will always wonder what he missed. It will haunt him forever wondering what if he had decided to let his desires succomb before she took him over before she devoured him. Love it. Only you my friend. Electric Blue

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Maggie

Such interesting thoughts and conclusions you have come to. Thank you for reading and sharing them with me. Always a pleasure, Cat

2 Quills

17 years ago

Shwing

WOW this was awesome. I think it had everything and it almost even had the sink lol. I'm gonna have to stop by here more often. Nice read Cat! Be well, Corey (2Quills)

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

hello

Thank you for reading and responding. Sorry I am so late in getting to this. Always, Cat

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