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night

i collapse
into night's embrace
i unfold
into nothing

my daydreams
are over...

our affair
has just begun.



— Kailashana, Jun 28, 2009

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leonard daranjo

16 years 11 months ago

Anna

The first stanza: i collapse into night’s embrace i unfold into nothing got me. It gives the picture of a free unhibited fall through space. I don't know whether you listen to Jazz. Often have I heard musicians do this. Their notes just tumble out and take a free fall like a parachute before it opens up. The feeling is pretty exhilarating. Leonard
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RobertKnott

16 years 9 months ago

There is much beauty in

There is much beauty in simplicity; i've often wondered if people see it's place left quietly, gracefully... as if abandoned to the god "hectic"- but the innocent infant, inspiration, lives always within scenes; a waiting, patient, for the senses- and rich be your harvest. for love is written always between the lines, and beauty be it's verse. this you do.
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doorman

16 years 9 months ago

This one is a real pearl,

This one is a real pearl, kailashana! I'll check out 'black and white' very soon. I want to get a feel for your work first. Sincerely, Espen.