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To You

Shadows engulfed me, when you walked away the torture unbearable, you ended my day The aggony to much, to dance in the light The darkness my friend,i dwelled in the night You destroyed my soul,deleted my dream I was an empty shell with eyes with no gleam I prayed for death, i wanted to die When i woke in the morning,i wanted to cry when you came back to me it was a breath of fresh air No longer felt the burn Of the suns angry glare You brought back my purpose And my hope to go on, No longer did i fear tommorrows approching dawn I will love you forever You must understand I am at your mercy As i extend my hand Will you love me too Accept the gift of my soul if you dont where my heart is, Will be a big gapping hole Ill be a spiritless being With no where to roam For ill belong to you Till God calls me home
— greeneyes, Jun 25, 2009

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Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Sad tellings

Of a broken heart hope you are feeling better (hugz) ... but the poem itself shows a lot of promise I like where you went with this one ... I have done a small edit they are just suggestions just had a play with it because i liked it so much ... hope you didnt mind ... Much love Jayne x x Shadows engulfed me, as you walked away unbearable this torture, you ended my day The agony to much, to dance in the light darkness my friend,dwelled in the night destroying my soul,deleted my dream this empty shell twin orbs no gleam In praying for death, i wanted to die When woken in the mourning,i wanted to cry when you came back to me blew in like fresh air No longer felt burning Of a suns angry glare You brought back a purpose my hope did go on, No longer did fear tomorrow's encroached dawn I will love you forever You must understand I am at your mercy extending my hand Will you love me enough too Accept this gift of soul if you dont where my heart is, It lays gaping in a hole being spiritless being With no where left to roam For ill belong to you Till God does call me home I shall return in the edits LOL ... HUGZ Jayne x