Loving Fear,

Glaring eyes,
beautiful red,
haunting the graves,
of the permanently dead,
a vampire of blood,
killer of night,
taking her victims one by one,
fearing the glaring sun,
hands covered in blood,
living in the yard of dead,
immortal love is in heart,
never dying away,
like her loves mind,
he haunts the yard,
in sheer fear,
of seeing she,
his killer of mind,
and lover by soul.

(Title changed)

— ANC1996, Jun 24, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

Critiques

ANC1996

17 years 1 month ago

Dagum!

You type alot lol! I see what your talking about and i try as hard as i can to get away from all the other vamp stories and such.And thanks for being honest,(or "goin all Jedi on me) lol,and definatly save what you typed above what you typed...did that make sense?Oh well,Im takin any suggestions i can :] Peace out girl(vampire)scout :] Adri

Lonnie

17 years 1 month ago

Awesome, Adri !!!

This is the first I've read by you, and if it's any indication of what you're capable of doing, you certainly have a bright future ahead as a Poet! Kudos!

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Adri ....

Good to read a little more of you ... I love vamps so I love this one ... Hugz Much Love Jayne x ...oh and I agree with Lonnie the future poets are here with us now and its wonderful to watch ...

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh Adriiiiiiiiiiiii

OK so this means I'm caught up now LOL. I must agree with Kelsey, Adri,that this could be taken up a few notches. Remember "Scarlet Wedding Night"? You have it in you to be a simply amazing poetess, and you could throw alot into this one. Kelsey is a wise girl. Heed her words. Do not follow, but create your own path. You're already unique and wonderful, put that into your poetry. Your poetry should say who you are, and who you want to be. Now as for the poem itself, you know my stance on vampires, I'm not a big fan. I would like to see you write about something else, and I can't say much else because, unlike Kelsey, I don't know much about vampires. Just always remember to do it as yourself and make it different. Never fear being different with your poetry. Reaching to be different is a chance you take and a chance that means you are unafraid to be more than who you already are. Peace love n hugs Katie

bella1

17 years ago

wow

that was a great poem adri u write really good{:

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