Burning Shadows

Congrats on a well-penned, well-thought-out, poem! Your imagery is mind-boggling and the language superb! Kudos, my friend!

My goodness I think you should just flow more often Rett ... you really have something going on at the moment, and it is good ;) ... loving these last two of yours ... they spoke to my heart and when they do that they get .... falling stars of five .... excellent work but ... I have one suggestion ? if you dont mind ... blackened souls light the way blackemed souls sear the way ? Dont know it was just the word I thought and then light was there lol ... Ok I have had my pain meds back to bed for me LOL much love Jayne sorry to rave on lol Hugz x

Rett I just love the flow and content of this amazing poem. Shadowed voices follow me Singing durges endlessly I know this so well my friend Electric blue

Rett, Beautiful poem here line 12 "claiming [that] she knows it all" would flow better [for me] line 16 I stumble a bit with the flow Just a suggestion here and this may be just me~ all in all, good one Rett! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Great powerful write here with a good balance of heavy reminder & lighter insight to offer. I wonder if I might be able to offer humbly a small suggestion, the rhyming scheme is perfect but war & scar (might sound different in your accent (chuckle... have you done a spoken word, love to hear it!), but for what it's worth what if you tried something like "Men keep going off to war Baring scars from what they saw"... though I see there was a different intent here, but even... "Men keep going off to war we all bare scars & check the score" or "everyone bares scars for sure", I'm sure you can create a better line that fits the rhyme more smoothly in any case (than mine I mean, I am rushing here & my suggestions are a bit lame). Well done on this though, great poem Cheers~ Anni ~~~ "Courage, it would seem, is nothing less than the power to overcome danger, misfortune, fear, injustice, while continuing to affirm inwardly that life with all its sorrows is good; that everything is meaningful even if in a sense beyond o

Rett Thank you my friend for your long distant hug You words flow like smooth honey............ "Men keep going off to war, baring scars from what they saw". These lines from your poem. Lonnie comes to mind. A lot of his poetry is so full of beauty and of pain of the day and nightmares that come back from Nam. The shadowed voices and scenes will never leave his dreams. A constant reminder has he. But out of this. Lonnie creates such beauty with his silver tongue. Where words make their mark on the paper that waits. So to release the stressfull durges that endlessly haunt him. Always Electric Blue

I love the way your lines sing and I love the images they carry with them. I absolutely enjoyed the read, the movement, the lilt, the wonderful imagery. Great write Rett. Leonard

Rett Loved the innate rhythm of this poem. I read it aloud often as I imagined people sitting around a bonfire and sharing their stories of darkness and light, scars and healing. Wonderful poetry. Cheers Tania

Seems a little blue for you, Rett. A beautiful rendition of that which is sad but true. The images of hell on earth are clear. And I like the photography metaphors. Good work as always. Deelilah

makes me think of rap a good sweet poem though Rett Im wowed that this came about in a relaxed state freeforming it great results love the use of "torn" in this