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Becoming the Vampire

Waking, darkness enfolds the day, day is the night
The night embraces the moon, so bright is its light
Waking, darkness creeps over the bed, enfolding you
You become one with the monster, cold morning dew
It takes over, turning you inside out, dark soul
Freeze! The night is in you, keeping you close
Claws and teeth, the battle is on, no one to save
No one to guard, this deathly hold, blood that you crave
White face, bloody fang, you are the monster afar
Take your new identity, it is who you are
— hardcorechick28, Jun 23, 2009

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hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

hey

Thank you for your feedback...glad to be a part of the site. It is nice to be in touch with likeminded individuals. I look forward to more of our chats in the near future. Blood and Best Wishes Carrie
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

So glad you have joined

So glad you have joined us! I think...no, I know that you will be welcomed here with open arms, and bloodstained fangs. We have lots of vampire lovers here. I appreciate all the help you have given me, and will continue to give.{ She is teaching me to be computer literate, and has already saved my butt a couple of times.} Thank you,Carrie.- Gee.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Carrie,

I have a long standing fascination with vampires, love your take of their world here. I see you have already connected with my favourite little vampire here on Neo, that's great! Yours, ~Nina
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Carrie

I love a good vampire piece. I've written a few vampire poems myself. The dark side of poetry, which you have written very well, is most appealing to me. I hope to read more of your work in the future. Always, Cat