please don't let me cry

There is much in this poem to commend it and some that cannot meet that standard. The following lines are excellent, novel and help draw the reader to the emotive (which is clearly part of the poem's purpose): Spark this heart cause I am cold Maybe no one cares Like the main river Running through namibia There’s some that never learn to fly Featherless mothers crush thier dreams In hospital at early ages There are a number of sore spots: spelling (thier is their; you didn't capitalize Namibia, perhaps for cause); tired words, "Walk my shoes just to see/ What it’s like to be me" (the little twist doesn't add enough sizzle to use this dead old line); and the overused "wings" metaphor. Still, I like experiments, even with old lines because eventually the experimenting pays off. Good work. Keep writing. Brian