Perseverance

I know that sounds arrogant and magnaminous, but I know how hard you have worked to produce such fine work. I salute you sir, and may come back later if I can find anything to crit. Cheers, Jess

Another spendid poem from Zeus. I absolutely love the beginning stanza to the poem, that's some beautiful imagery. And as Jess said in chat, the last four lines are awesome. Good choice of title, too, perseverence says the message of the poem without having to say it in the poem itself. Well done. Peace love n hugs Katie

Perseverance sounds like a Greek name to me. I like the line: "Persverance stands emotionless in a duel with the force of darkness." Gee.

Keep up the good work, you GORGEOUS GREEK XD. You're an amazing person and poet. Peace, love, and dreams Ky~

totally impressed Paul you have made a magical poem words escape my brain this evening I know I will come and read this often now its friggin' awesome

it bought tears to my eyes! Inbetween sadness and joy!! :)fleur

I love this entire stanza: "In the dungeons of agony Lives a peasant Known as joy His destiny Turns bleak At one’s will" It just bleeds darkness. Your work is becoming consistently amazing. =) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Flying so high, trying to remember How many cigarettes did I bring along? When I get down, I'll jump in a taxi-cab Driving through London-town to cry you a song..." - Jethro Tull

Now this one I cannot say much about other that, Dang fine job, dang fine write and totally awesome read! You hard work and perseverance has paid dividends! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." Rett

Paul, I just snuck a second of Neo time in & found this incredible work in spotlight as it well deserves. There are so many lines & stanzas complete that are brilliant, but the last one almost made me bleed it dug so deeply into me. Great work & congrats~ Anni ~~~ "Courage, it would seem, is nothing less than the power to overcome danger, misfortune, fear, injustice, while continuing to affirm inwardly that life with all its sorrows is good; that everything is meaningful even if in a sense beyond o

. . . but you could be a lil more specific, I really feel u on that first part. . . actually it made perfect sense

You wear many hats, Paul...none so fine as your poetry divine, resurrected from the time when knighthood was in flower and the dragons of innocence were burning with the fever: Write me! ~A "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin

Congrats on Spotlight, friend. =) I'd throw some cookies your way, but afraid they'd land in the Hudson first. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Flying so high, trying to remember How many cigarettes did I bring along? When I get down, I'll jump in a taxi-cab Driving through London-town to cry you a song..." - Jethro Tull

I am not normally a gusher but in this instance ... I shall ... Paul this is wonderful , you have reached into your depths and founds words to describe this ? A flawless passion Burns slowly In the hearts of few SO BLOODY true I am still a novice , still learning will always been learning ... but I love that people can reach and touch the stars ... Its nice sitting back watching you all ... you really are quite something special all of you And so is this poem ;) Love Jayne x x though my passion is flawed I watch on in awe

Goood poem i really liked this one, The first sntanza is my favorite part. Btw congrats on Spotlight :] Peace out, Adri

watching flames sparkle, good write thankyou for directing me to it washington fear

yet I seem to remember you saying in chat that someone had accused you of being preachy. This is not true here, but I can see how that conception may have been garnered. You are writing for someone but I don't feel you in it. The oldest cliche in the writers handbook is "write what you know". I don't doubt that you have felt what you wrote, but the poetic language distances me from it, I don't feel it with you. Maybe that's what that person meant by "preachy". The poems I most love are the ones where I hear the poet talking straight to my heart. I want the poet to talk to me directly, as if face to face. You silly young man! You asked the opinion of an elderly academic and you got it. I hope it might help a bit more than it may hurt. kind regards, Jean meow yip, purr, yowl and perfect body language of approval, contempt or demand