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Forest of the Fine and Fair

Love,
Am I,
It's not the beauty that everyone sees,
that's to simple even for me,

It's the secret that you keep,
that is only heard in your speech of days gone by,

A song that can't be learned,
It may be born not in the mind, but in the hidden place,
that only you can see,

That Illuminating light that filters through the dense canopy,
Just enough to see the nakedness of your very being,

Somehow I have enter in your world, and caught a gleams
of the splendor that is deep within,

I stood in the entangling undergrowth and called to you,
but you could not hear my words, for my language is not like yours,

The language of the earth,
when things were spoken for their value and not for their gain,

Their you are in the distance dancing in your nakedness in your happy place,
I try to reach you, but I am held in place,
by the things I have yet to shed,

I struggle to get free, but all that is freed is my anger,
suddenly you are not there and I am ripped from this place and thrown from whence I came,

I look around and scream your name, slowly realizing that this will never be,

For I am in the wilderness of my despair,
and you,
in the forest of all that is Fine and Fair......


— Eduardo Cruz, Jun 21, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Eddie...

So good to see you here... I like where this poem took me, but there seemed to me to be a few sentences that were long, and the beginning seemed off to me... perhaps I read it wrong, if so... please explain, but... Love, am I, it's not the beauty that everyone sees... maybe, loved, or in love or Love, is it instead of am I... Somehow I have enter your world, and caught a gleams of the splendor that is deep within... enter... entered... caught a gleams... maybe, caught the gleams of splendor deep within... cuts down some of the sentence, tighter and doesn't change your image at all, just a suggestion... good to see you posting! Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Richard,

I see the errors of the write, I will correct and condense. the you so much for the help, it's always a pleasure to here from you. thanks again for the help and the encouragement!! Eddie "In stupidity there is clarity of the individual"