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Jack & Jill move up to hill

JACK AND JILL MOVED UP THE HILL

Jack was handsome
His mind was sharp
His words captivating 
A gift ,
A silver tongue


Jacks money , made
Climbing  ,  the backs
Of innocent slaves 

Taking the good
Making the bad
Always focus
His silver tongue
Would add  ?

It’s about me
The house on the hill
Adding more to me
This title will ?


Jill her beauty
A figure
 Perfection
A goddess
On earth
Eyes
Gave attention 



Jill ?

Her mind just as sharp
Body movements
Shaking her hair
A finger on her cheek
As she  walked  

When she spoke
A voice like a harp
Her mixture of tones
Seducing the coldest
 hearts 

Jack and Jill
Wanted more
Believing in
Their body movements
And a silver tongue ’

They lost faith
In their simple house
Even though it was paid
That bigger house on to hill
Fits their silver tongue

On the hill they moved
Buying with his money
A new title to be used

I live on the hill ?

Something was missing
Was it their friends ?
Leaving behind
All those relationships 
Laughing
To no end

This was the trade
For the house on the hill
A house empty  dream
Friends that are real

Jacks money
Jill beauty
The house on the hill
Could’t replace
Relationship
True friendships 
Love
That old simple  house 
Made real  
— press, Jun 20, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Press this is very good …

Press this is very good ... needs a little tidy up ... I shall leave that to the experts though... I know they will point you the right way ... Love Jayne x
press

press

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Jayne Hey Fleur can I respond two at once

I am going out to buy a broom [A big one so I can tidy up a bit] big smile ? JC & fleur And don't think I haven't been reading yours to ? Surprise , but we all know that power couple ? in high school Jack was captain of all sports , Jill was captain of the cheer team ? They were home coming king & queen all tho this poem is to long . This is what happens after high school You know my stars are you guys reading my poems Love to you guys Press
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

I think

there is too many stories being told here and I found myself getting a bit lost in the confusion, but it is interesting, just needs a little clean up and it will be a wonderful work!! :)fleur
press

press

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Jayne Hey Fleur can I respond two at once

I am going out to buy a broom [A big one so I can tidy up a bit] big smile ? JC & fleur And don’t think I haven’t been reading yours to ? Surprise , but we all know that power couple ? in high school Jack was captain of all sports , Jill was captain of the cheer team ? They were home coming king & queen all tho this poem is to long . This is what happens after high school You know my stars are you guys reading my poems Love to you guys Press