Seren

Jun 19, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Never Enough

Never thinking
to be enough
sometimes feeling
is really tough

Lack of something
I cant place
dwindling of ego
consumed my grace

Trying to flow
among the world
thinking I'm nothing
starting to hurl

Scars from past
still mark life
striving to rid
myself in flight

How can I change
the heart of me?
what is it that
everyone See's

Watching night
dreaming of love
trying to draw
strength from above

Life isn't fair
no its not
sometimes thinking
losing my plot

Minute miracles
woven through life
showing me wonder
furthers insight

At the end of days
battling my burden
pushing for enough
you can be certain

— Seren, Jun 19, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Fleur MacDonald

17 years 1 month ago

Excellent

write, really enjoyed it, just reading it now has helped me be rid of the crap in my head so I can go back to sleep!! Thankyou :)fleur

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

You are such a treasure thank you .... it helped me too and maybe people might know me a little better now I start to reveal myself its scary but Brian(Bjp) says to me , take risks , so this one was a risk made worth it by your comment ... dream sweet dreams lovely lady Jayne ...

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

I don't comment much on your work.

Perhaps I am a bit put off by the short-line rhyming structure you often use. Your content, imagery and wordcrafting are always really good, but I think I would like to see you try and say just a little more in each line. Not as a general change, just to try it. cheers Jess I am not right, I am just this guy, you know?

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Jess

LOL that is what I struggle with , when I say too much ? my form is diminished ... in my eyes anyway ... when I have put poems in with more words? I end up being told to take some out so I think I ended up trying to say less with less LMAO ... its past dinner and I have slept the day away and havent eaten a thing so I am off to forage for food ... Much Love Jayne x

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

LOL, beware critics!

for they will always eat their words, and so end up hungry and cranky. Write as you write, your process is yours, I'm just this guy, you know? love and light, Jess

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Jess ...

Your the sometimes cranky critic down south of me ... LOL ... But in saying that you have inspired me more than you know .. your gutsy Jess ... take no prisoners ... (now if I am wrong you will correct me I would expect nothing less) .. your impulsive but then so am I , though as I have grown older I think more before I speak , words? I know how they can tear a soul apart ... But a critic of a poem? and the critic of your actual self? are two totally different things ... and I recognise that ... I want to be good at this , its one of the last things I have left to call my own , that my illness hasnt repossessed , So i strive to help beginners cause I cant call myself that anymore LOL ...I am a semi-poet LMAO ... getting there but with help ... I write the way I write , of that moment , though more and more I think of content and structure and the message I want at the end ... For that gift , I think the professor(who is a saint god that man showed me what bullshit some of my stuff was but in the sweetest way LOL) and Brian Bjp those two people dont realise the huge impact they have had on my poetry , there are so many I cant name them all I just realised LOL , and I will be forever grateful I am now sharing my poetry with friends and family and they love where I am going (and tell me when they are shit) as good family do ... And your still just that guy down the road , but i do look up to you Much love and respect Jayne x

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

Yeah, I'm the cranky guy down the road

who stands up to messiahs and lightning with a half brick in his hand. Cheers, Jess

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Yep but I am neither messiah

Yep but I am neither messiah or lightning Jess ... just like you getting through each day at a time its all we can do .. hugs hope your sleeping well ... she hasnt found me yet .. Love Jayne x

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

and I don't carry my half brick against you

or anyone on this site. Ever. The only real lightning is worth getting hit by and there are no messiahs. I get through every day, one day at a time, just like you, I thought you understood that. No she seldom finds me, but I live with that too. Cheers, Jess

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

I dont meen it that way Jess

I dont meen it that way Jess I meen I am nothing compared to what you face , which I know nothing of so I stand in the background .. and be the silent shadow watching as you stand up against the world ... take care ... regards Jayne

docmaverick

17 years 1 month ago

I dunno....

...I tend to like the way your "cadence" sways. I will admit, yours is a slightly confusing message...but, I still liked the way it flowed. Take it for what it's worth, I LIKED IT ! Write on, #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Ahhhhh

Doc ... thank you for the lovely compliment ... and I shall endeavor to answer your question as shortly as possible ... this is about my self confidence(or lack of it) after my marriage crushed every little piece that was me .... In the end I am just saying even though I still feel this way I will always strive to be Enough in my own eyes ... there you have it and done without a novella lol ... keep writing I have been enjoyinh your work lately .. awesome hun really love where you go when you write ... Love Jayne x

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

=)

Jayne, I think the message is pretty straight forward and you express it well. confusion and doubt are all part of our humanity. Be well, love, Cat

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Cat

You are my angel you know that , When I see you there with your feline friend I always smile and I am now ... Much Love Jayne

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