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JB

Stirrings of life

Stirrings of the thirst and lust for life

Slowly awakening from deep within

Awakened by that slightest touch

That deep soul grabbing look

 

The smile that speaks volumes,

The voice heard softly in her ears

Speaks of wonder, promise and reckless abandon

A whisper of life, a shudder of anticipation

 

Each passing glance gives away so much

The eyes look deeper than the surface

Knowing each deep dark painful thought

Yet healing with their understanding

 

One soul reaching out to the other

Connecting in ways never before thought to be possible

Staying connected, even when not in the same room,

An eternal connection that comes once in a life time

 

The shudders run up and down her spine

Causing tingling sensations to arouse all thoughts

Of you, your touch, your voice and your closeness

Consuming all her senses, her body, soul and mind

 

Possibilities shown, slowly being experienced

Each moment spent with him a new one,

Exciting, longing, a lingering feeling of anticipation for the next touch

Kiss and time when two bodies become one, as their souls already are.

— Feebie, Jun 18, 2009

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Region, Country: Gauteng, ZMB

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Robert Frost

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

A couple of things bother me just a little

The eyes look deeper than the surface Their eyes look deeper into each other? Their eyes look deeper and deeper? An eternal connection that comes once in a life time [eternal for a lifetime?] and the unusual switch to second person in: Of you, your touch, your voice and your closeness Consuming all her senses, her body, soul and mind Of him, his touch... ? Cheers, Jess
JB

Jillian Botha

16 years 11 months ago

LOL Jess

Thank you for the feedback Jess as given in only the way you can! :-) This write was inspired by a recent event in my life which occured shortly after one of the most devastating times in my life/ This person left me reeling with the bitter sweet possibilities that life has to offer on all ways and the write bouncing from the third person and back. i am trying to indicate the confused state i was in at the time of this latest discovery of the sweeter part that life had to offer. as for the eternal and life time line. go figure. i see time as many facets. strange as that line might sound. LOL thats the only way i can try to explain this one to you. Thanks for reading. Much love Jill Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

I figured it was inspired...

and know about know about the devasting events. But the device of using confusion for form doesn't work. Regard my suggestions or not, your choice. I would not be your friend if I did not regard your poetry as much as empathic love. Cheers, Jess
JB

Jillian Botha

16 years 11 months ago

Lady of the surprise postings??

WOW! never knew i was known for surprise postings doc :-) Well i feel the only write that can top your previous one is one born of experience and insight to the subject matter. So i guess the only answer i have for you is.....time will tell. Much love Feebie (Jill) Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)