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ANC1996
ANC1996
Jun 17, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

When fallen angels fly...

When fallen angels fly,
I'm afraid I must tell you goodbye,
only because the sky,
darkend by power,
will scare away bright flowers,
turn light to dark
softness to bark,
and my love i'll say
wont turn,
but my time with the light
is over,
darkness is here
my scarlet rose hides my fear,
crescent moon save me,
for I'm forever here.
Don't break just fall
into where the darkness crawls.

— ANC1996, Jun 17, 2009

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Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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orgami

17 years 1 month ago

crafting

I like this one Anc because you are trying new poetry style You have good descriptive lines in this it moves carefully because Im thinking perhaps you were writing this way but im sure as you get comfortable with variations of styles you will be more freer all in all I enjoyed the read in your handling of subject matter Very well done Poem!!
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Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

Ohhhhhhhhhh Adriiiiiiiiii

Hey girl, first off LOVE the title. This so well written, great to see you putting imagery into your poems, you weave images so intricately into your words. I only caught one typo (darkend=darkened) and again you forgot to capitilize an "I". Only line I'm not sure of really is "my scarlet rose is my dear,"...perhaps it could be something like "my scarlet rose is so near," or "my scarlet rose bleeds here,". That line just didn't seem to fit...it's up to you though. But you are improving, Adri, and I'm very impressed. Well done. Peace n love Katie
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years 1 month ago

:)

Thanks Org and Katie :] Katie- Seriously?!I didnt even see an I grr ill fix it lol,and yeah i agree about the "My scarlet rose is my dear" now b ut at first it was all i could think of lol.btw i LOVE the title too XD && Orgami- Thanks for your comment,i try to do different things sometimes,eeven if they sound the same-ish lol Peace out yawl! Adri
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years ago

Awesome :)

Okay, so now that i look back, i can see what you mean and i think i will break it up. Thanks Bunches-Peace out, AdriNicole
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bella1

17 years ago

wow

that was a great poem i really liked it cant wait to read more bella peace

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