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Pure Clarity

 Much burdens my heart
  In these hours of turmoil
  Dismay crowds my mind
  Uncertainty shines oh so brightly
  Hope has no say this night
  Therefor I beg for
  A moment of pure clarity
  To put aside malicious thoughts
  Allow faith to dry my tears
  For once more we will prevail
  Our voices shall be heard
  Another gloomy sky
  Shall not be seen by my eyes
  My fellow brethren
  We will not allow rage
  As a guest in our homes
 Nor will we allow pain
 To infect our very veins
  We are stronger than that
  We must be true to ourselves,
  And in time we shall be saved
— paul, Jun 17, 2009

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

you think so?

Is that all it takes? Wishit was that simple. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.
Apostolos "Paul" Anagnostopoulos

Apostolos "Pau…

16 years 11 months ago

Jesss

Isn't it a poet's purpose to stand for a just world even if its a figment of imagination. Always thanks for the advice that has made me a better poet
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

yes, but this time

you pre-empted all my comments in private chat. It is a really good poem. But you post on the site, expect comments on the site cheers, Jess
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 11 months ago

Heyyyyyyyyyyy Paul

I like how this turned out, it turned out quite well. I have to say, paul, I really think your poetry is strengthening in terms of word usage. "Malicious" and "clarity" are some great words, and they really speak volumes. Well done. Peace love n hugs Katie
Apostolos "Paul" Anagnostopoulos

Apostolos "Pau…

16 years 11 months ago

Cookie

Let dem haters hate. We poets are destined for big things even if they seem distorted. thank you for the generous words and continued support
Rett

Rett

16 years 11 months ago

Paul, this turned out very well indeed.

Very good word usage. The hope and wish for clarity and for control of emotions comes through extremely well. Personally, I like the message and the way it was written and since I cannot give 4 and 4/5ths, you will just have to settle for a 5.. Sorry to be harsh. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Apostolos "Paul" Anagnostopoulos

Apostolos "Pau…

16 years 11 months ago

i guess

ill have to do with a five lol. Thank ypou rett your kind words mean alot and your support and critiques also wite on
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years 11 months ago

SG!

All you need is an 'e' on therefor and the poem will be complete. =) When are you posting the NYC poem? I can't wait for that one in its finished form!! ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Sprawling on the fringes of the city in geometric order an insulated border in between the bright lights and the far un-lit unknown" - Rush
Apostolos "Paul" Anagnostopoulos

Apostolos "Pau…

16 years 11 months ago

jess

Thank you for you kind and honest feedback always the sg himself
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Taniaspoetry

16 years 11 months ago

In time ...

Paul This a a lovely message of hope. You've captured a universal emotion, and yet spoken in a unique voice that is your own. Love these lines: Nor will we allow pain To infect our very veins A minor suggestion: Read aloud, this line works better with 'into' - As a guest in our homes. Or may be thats just my ear playing tricks on me :) Cheers, Tania