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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jun 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

IMMORTAL BELOVED

IMMORTAL BELOVED 


 My memory is etched
                    upon your eternity      
   forged in the refinery that cast you.                                                                 
                     Your gilded gold                                                                                             
           now adorns my heart.

Seared by  fires that wrought you                                                             
           branded  by love's consummation                                                
your mark will forever glow,                                                                   
           now a new Star’s constellation.

Beatific vision                                                                                                              
   you came down to earth                                                                                          
   God's hand
was there at your birth.                                                              
  You emit rays of Grace 
from your angelic face -                                              
            Saints carried you home with mirth.

After you

 I’ve found my life turned around   
  THere is no longer safe nor sound.                                                                 
   I’ve been down  "Damascas Road"*
   but there is no conversion, or  place 
   my sins to offload...

"I see now in a glass darkly, but in heaven it shall be face to face"


*cf Ref. to Saul of Tarsus who was converted to Christianity on 'Damascas Road' to then become Paul.

BjR  16 June '09

— Bonitaj, Jun 16, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

I am seared in the heat of

I am seared in the heat of your vision Boni and my sins revealed in flames ... omg its beautiful really truely is ... Much Love Jayne x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

IMMORTAL BELOVED

Dear Jayne! I am so happy to have you "on-side" :) I posted this 24hrs ago and heard nothing and thought - oh no! it's too cerebral or religious or whatever - nobody likes it! Just goes to show. Thank you - coming from your creative soul I really appreciate it! Before you go - have to tell you about a very Tongue-in-cheek, scathing commentary I'm about to make in my next submission on a psychological case study! Promise me you'll look ok! Thanks again Boni
CN

Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Boni

Can take forever sometimes for things to show up on the radar, time zones and all. I like your treatment of this theme, but can I ask why you set it out structurally like this? I find it just a touch distracting, diverts me from the message and impedes the flow. So I think for my two bobs worth. Love. Craig
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

IMMORTAL BELOVED

Hiya Craig! Good to hear from you again - and yes I take your comment "not lightly" Trouble is two-fold: 1) One man's nightmare is another's creative flare :) 2) I am having crazy difficulties with my venerable ol' faithful man-made machine... ze computer ya!? Thanks for stopping by though. Will bear these comments in mind! CHeers Boni