Candlewitch

Jun 16, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Time After Time (rewrite #3)

Time After Time (rewritten June 17th 2009)
(for S. James)

Your soft grey-brown eyes laugh
chasing the icy fingers
of the dead of winter
from out my heart
while your warm even breath
sends silky shivers along my skin...
I sigh with the realization
that our years together
have been an odyssey spent in
the living knowledge
of each others inner beings
and I would stop time
in it's journey...
to preserve this one moment
through an eternity of night!

— Candlewitch, Jun 16, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

infinite_dwarf

17 years 1 month ago

Sweet!!!

Beautiful write for dear Steve. =) I smile at your happiness. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks Jess!

Steve is in a blue funk over his birthday, and I just wanted to cheer him up. By the way, I like your new piccy! Always, Cat

poewriter58

17 years 1 month ago

Cat

Goood but I cannot help but feel it is missing something, I have seen much better than this from you.( I never stop pushing you do I) Chrys

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Well Chrys

Nope, you never stop and as I see it, that just gives me something to work on, LOL! Love, Cat

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

This fealt loving, kind and

This fealt loving, kind and important to me. The kind of poetry that keeps me coming back, eloquent simple and true. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

=)

Thanks Jess, that is high praise coming from you! I wrote the poem as a birthday present to my husband, Steve. It put a smile on his face. Always, Cat

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Cat … I came home to find

Cat ... I came home to find this wonder ... Steve is so blessed to have you , the love you feel for each other is amazing 27yrs ? ... You still love him like you did when you were young I can feel it in your words ... Love Jayne x x

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Jayne

Very perceptive of you! Steve is my everything. We don't have children and I think that has brought us closer together. By the way, is that a new picture? I like it! Love, Cat

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Cat

Cat I loved this the first time I read it and even more so the second time around I loved the edit ... you write so poignantly about steve the love you hold for him shines like a beacon ...... and yes it is a new picture but I hate having my picture taken till I was convinced I wasnt a hag from hell lol.. so now I have one so everyone can see who they are talking too .. (hugz) hope you and steve are enjoying a lovely summer day/evening much love Jayne x

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

Five stars for you. You are beautiful! Love, Cat

Electric Blue

17 years 1 month ago

Time after Time

Cat How you understand the meaning of time of a special love. If I could turn back time but time stands still for me in the moments I recapture of being with my love those speical moment that are so timeless. They never ever leave you - They are with me every second of my day and night for all my eternity wonderful Electric blue

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Maggie

That is the real treasure in our lives! Always, Cat

Rett

17 years 1 month ago

Cat, Marvelous

What did you think of my title? I love the title. How was my language use? I thought the language use was superb. What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing? It was very pleasing and read extremely well. How does this theme appeal to you? It appeals to me a lot as that is the way I feel about my wife of 34 years. How was the beginning/ending of the poem? Beginning/ending was very very good. Time after time, I read something of yours and cannot help but feel privileged! Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Rett

Thirty-four years and still going strong! That is just wonderful! See what a difference the right person in your life can make. It isn't hard at all, just one day at a time with the right attitude. We treat each other with respect, kindness and understanding and it makes all the difference in the world. That is what love is. Thanks for your lovely review of my poem. Always, Cat

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