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Jun 16, 2009
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Inside/Outside
Inside a song
a killing time resides
of pleasure and pain
an empty heart
a thoughtless whim
of saturated notes
a rounded beat unravels
to a broken heart
on a road to ruin
&
Outside a song
genetic makeup begins
of broken strings
and an empty glass
from inside a dream
a shuffled beat
across the skin
the drumsticks roll
of muted vocal
and muffled tone
a killing time resides
of pleasure and pain
an empty heart
a thoughtless whim
of saturated notes
a rounded beat unravels
to a broken heart
on a road to ruin
&
Outside a song
genetic makeup begins
of broken strings
and an empty glass
from inside a dream
a shuffled beat
across the skin
the drumsticks roll
of muted vocal
and muffled tone
— Fleur MacDonald, Jun 16, 2009
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Kailashana
17 years 1 month ago
And somehow the dirge takes
Fleur MacDonald
17 years 1 month ago
Thankyou sweet one,
Eed Yut
17 years 1 month ago
Brilliant!!
Fleur MacDonald
17 years 1 month ago
Thankyou,
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