Sacrificial Lamb

Poignant and profound Rett ... what else can I say you touched my spirit and faith in this , and renewed it ... Much respect and Love Jayne P.S. just noticed the typo on thief Rett ... hope you dont mind me pointing it out ...

Awesome,Rett! You not only are one of the best poets I have ever had the privilege of meeting,but a man who knows where to put his faith. A fine work my friend! Gee.

A fine poem here Rett, I have a few little bumps here and there, hope youn don't mind. I know you don't silly me, but quand même! The robe that was won.........the robe that once was won? The crypt where he shall lay.......The crypt there where he lay?....... The crypt where cold he lay? The theif there beside him.....the theif hung there beside him? Ruby are the marks Where pierced were his hands.........and pierced with holes his hands? Ruby was the gash That in his side does stand A sacrificial lamb Was slain that we might see That above all things....................upon all things above..........something a little bothersome here Rett, it must be noble ......here and doesn't quite give that effect for me. These two last lines will mean so much to those with faith that they MUST be perfect. Don't you think? He placed his faith in thee As ever Ann of Norway

Beautiful. only one little thing, thief is not spelled correctly. I feel like a total b mentioning it. Linda

Thank you, Rett, for causing me to reflect on the more important things in life. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd

I personaly like A crown of thorns upon his head but, it works well either way and it is yours to do with what you want but, the singular "thorn" seems to deminish the sacrafice a bit, makes it a little too comfie or politicly correct. But, I still enjoyed it very much. Donnie/ Sinbad

Once more Rett with my feelings within the rythm of this piece I venture yet again some little thoughts, always respectful yours Ann of Norway. a thorned crown on his head........? thrown to the ground..................? either.........more blessÈd than the jewels..?..........or....then all the jewels........? who now resides above.........? The end is good now.

my friend. This is a beautiful poem. I'm not sure which corrections you've made but it sounds good to me. I especially appreciate that you have posted it, a tribute to your faith. 'Ruby are the marks Where nails pierced his hands Ruby was the gash That in his side does stand' That is my favorite verse, and I like the way it refers back to the 'drop of ruby red' in the first stanza. Yours, Deelilah

I've been reading your work, and I have to say this resonated the most. it takes a great deal of bravery to portray your Christian faith, and you do it with words, rhythm, and imagery that pull me along, wanting to know what comes next although I know the story. one small thing (oh boy) ... and it's very small. for the final line: "He placed his faith in thee" for me the word "on" rather than "in" would hold greater meaning, as Christ didn't only put his faith in us, but on us. we are now responsible for our own salvation. he opened the door with his sacrifice, it is up to us to walk through... and to me, "on" signifies this more completely. but then again, I could be wrong! with total respect and admiration =) Virginia