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Craig Norris
Jun 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

whisper

Half moons sharpened edge of clarity
sliding like a scimitar,
beyond the curve
of this palest wash of blue.

How the last look lingers
on the face I cannot see,
shining in another's night.

Where love lies languorous
sleeping,
bathing on a bed
beneath a window.

Kiss her softly
on the cheek for me,
lay my dreams upon her pillow,
whisper to her 
my name.

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Arrow

16 years 10 months ago

When will you write your book

of women's erotica? Reading your poems is like receiving love letters slid under the door. Not the IMPORTANT WORKS to be lectured about and forced to write papers about but the enjoyable kind one reads and has some chocolates with. And all the better for it. I particularly like the image of bathing on a bed. Line 6 - (on) the face I cannot see?
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

that's rather delightful

thank you so much Arrow, chocolate I agree is a wonderful accompanyment. Yes on line 6, and thank you again. Love. Craig
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 10 months ago

delicate, touching and intimate,

you have the grace, courage and elegance to express things a crusty old bastard like me can't get close to, cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

all a marvel..

how sweet it is to be a cherry tree casting blossom to the stars you are most kind Blanka, my thanks. Love. Craig
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Craig, this is so tender it

Craig, this is so tender it makes my heart ache. ~A "You begin saving the world by saving one person at a time; all else is grandiose romanticism or politics." Charles Bukowski
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

my heart ache

now that is something I am familiar with, we ache together. Love. Craig
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Taniaspoetry

16 years 10 months ago

Winsomely tender poetry

Winsomely tender poetry Craig. Particularly liked 'clarity sliding like a scimitar' which is exactly how it feels Cheers Tania
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

thanks Tania

I've just this morning been reading your take on families, I like it, will go back. Thanks for your comments here, glad you enjoyed. Love. Craig
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orgami

16 years 10 months ago

arc of hip

bent like the beauty of the keel in the heel of the lower tide awake when sleep divides the dream from the dreamers when drama of the day waits for dawns soft distance for the dark song of birds before the light I have watched the moon of valiant rest Beautiful Poem Craig!!!
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

so glad you enjoyed

that's a big thanks for the compliment,have been quite busy with my other life lately, it's nice to find time and feeling for a write. Cheers. Craig
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Miss Vivian

16 years 10 months ago

have to comment again

have to comment again Craig. I read this one over and over. It is my favourite - a big thing - of so many .... :) x v
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Craig,

I can't believe I missed this piece! One of your best writes yet, even though my apostrophe detector is beeping again (l.7 another's?) and I do have my doubts about the spelling of "langorous" (I have an inkling it might be "languorous", please doublecheck). Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Well my backyard neighbour I

Well my backyard neighbour I went away to come home and find you in spotlight .... And you are right where you are meant to be ... I have read a lot of your poetry and its all beautiful in its own right .. but this one ... this one is special and I know you probably know that ... when i write a good piece I always find a feeling of contentment at its finish like a job well done Your reaching for the stars and I think some of there shimmer fell on you ,,, beautiful poem Craig ... Congrates on spotlight so good to see you here ... Whats it like ? ... Seriously beautiful work ... love Jayne x
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dina grey

16 years 10 months ago

Beautiful

Very well done. whisper her my name........I loved it. Dina Grey
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Gerry

16 years 10 months ago

Everything!

This beautiful poem has it all. Gorgeous images and poetic word choice. Lovely! Gerry
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

thank you Gerry

for your kind comments, it is a sweet thing, it feels a little odd talking about your own poem, but then, parental pride and all that. Love. Craig
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

whisper

Craig. One of my very favorites of yours, but the first two lines seem to need some form of punctuation or a break. A beautiful write! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

Janice thankyou.

yes, you are right, I've been reading it through as one, but it works better I think with a break at the end of the second line. Glad you liked it. Love. Craig
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

whisper

Craig, Perfect,had to come back and change my vote~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Just had to add my

Just had to add my congrats to you for the spotlight and the chance to read something so elegant.Gee.
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

thanks Gee

I appreciate your comments, it is very generous of you. I have visited your page and love your work, once again my thanks. Cheers. Craig
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

Lovely to see you here in spotlight Craig & well deserved with t

Lovely to see you here in spotlight Craig & well deserved with this write as well, I have been so preoccupied I have delayed comment... & this moves me almost to tears, it is so lovely... Too much of your writing has a path to tenderness in me, it is as painful at times as it is joyful in it's beauty, sometimes it takes a little courage. I feel your writing is continually improving & refining, it must feel good, I feel proud of you. I hope you are happy (& staying warm, it has threatened snow here already a few times, must have shown there)~ Take care Anni ~~~ "Courage, it would seem, is nothing less than the power to overcome danger, misfortune, fear, injustice, while continuing to affirm inwardly that life with all its sorrows is good; that everything is meaningful even if in a sense beyond o
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

everything is meaningful

Thank you Anni, so nice to get your comments on this, it is a tender little poem and it's great that people like it. Have had early snow, last Monday and Tuesday, Nicola was here so she got two days off school, we built a Homer Simpson snowman, which today is now a puddle. Thanks again. Love. craig
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

I am no master

just a neophyte I listen to my feelings and it seems sometimes I hear them right.
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Craig Norris

16 years 10 months ago

thanks fleur

it was quite a lovely poignant moment watching the half moon sliding below the horizon in the middle of the day, realizing as it did it was rising in anothers sky. Happy that I seem to have caught some of it. Love. Craig
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orgami

16 years 10 months ago

Geezer is right Elegant

Craig you have it I lack it Elegance but I can learn I devour your poems following like tail lights the lead Im just a poor wingman who tears off on his own the dove who waits for the love talons of the hawk to peirce this heart great spotlight poem thirty eight and counting awesome peice Craig!!