Seren

Jun 14, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Dreaming Unicorns

Eves light standing
a wish made
the unicorn guardian
blessed be !
holding a babe

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In cradled wing
and grasping mane
astride my friend
We morphed again

Up and out
through atmosphere
on my winged ride
and loyal seer

Taking a right
around the moon
to the universe
becoming attuned

Gathering speed
smearing starlight
A unicorns mist
across midnight

Easing to stretch
amongst her mane
twin spirits we ,
are bound remain

Shoot to naught
the empty blackness
my eternal night
comfortably endless

Shifting again
beauties wing-back
homeward bound
our newest tack

Spinning to light
connecting stars
my unicorns magic
flashed away mars

A pass ahead
try not to fight
closing my eyes
I dream the night

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— Seren, Jun 14, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Bonitaj

17 years 1 month ago

Jayne! This is a first for

Jayne! This is a first for me! a) of your work; b) of this "genre" of 'Magical/mythical' poetry. It is unique and quite astonishing. I am borne on the wings of this wonderous ride no less than Aladdin was! "Shifting again beauties wing-back.... my unicorns magic flashed away mars" As my teenagers would say "Have you ever?" My response in this case - "NO NEVER" Magnificient! THank you for the magic! (I'm such a realist - it was a nice break!) Bonita j

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Bonitaj

Thank you so much for your comment I'm glad you enjoyed it .. this one was inspired by our own faerybeki ... In a comment to me the other day she said we should keep wishing for the unicorns to come back , so I wished this poem i guess and here it is ... I love anything mythical I love that world they take us to ... from this exsistance ... Glad some of the magic touched you ... thank you for the read and the comment I am touched you liked this one ... Love Jayne x

Candlewitch

17 years 1 month ago

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Thanks for creating a fabulous world where unicorns coexist with the loving side of human nature. This is a beautiful poem which makes me feel lighthearted and young! Indeed, blessed be! Love, Cat

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Cat

I often wonder if you aren't attuned to my world , you so often comment , and in your comments , say exactly , what I was trying for in the feel of the poem ... blessings to you and yours ... thanks for the read so glad you liked this one much love Jayne x x

leonard daranjo

17 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

Such a lovely, lively read - snapshot images beautifully woven into a captivating collage. Leonard

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Leonard ..

Thank you so much for the read and the comment I am so grateful you took the time , This one was inspired by another poet here , so when she finally gets to read it I hope she likes it as much as you do ... love Jayne x

Gerry

17 years 1 month ago

Mystical

A timely, mystical poem for the solstice. I loved the wild ride! Gerry

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Gerry

I so love mystery, the mysteries of the world? I try to bring them to my scribbles, so glad you enjoyed this one I wrote it after a comment by FaeryBeki , she said something along the lines of , if we keep wishing the unicorns will come back , but being a dreamer I dreamed some for her instead LOL ... Love Jayne x

autumnphoenix

17 years 1 month ago

Dreaming Unicorn

Hello, I loved this one. I enjoyed the pace and rhyme of your poem. I love unicorns. I use to collect them until I ran out of room. Its wonderful to still dream of something so pure. Good job bringing it to life. Dana

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Heya AutumnPhoenix

Really glad you liked this one , its one of my favourites as one of the poets here inspired it though she hasnt read it yet shes on holidays lol ... much love Jayne x

faerybeki

17 years ago

Jayne, here I was, wondering

Jayne, here I was, wondering how I was ever to catch up with all the posts you've made while I was away (had a fab time, thanks for asking ;)) and out jumped this lovely piece!! :) that I inspired it in anyway is an honour for me, thank you lovely! I love it Jayne, the rhyme really adds to the magic, and you have woven this ride fantastically! Oh I do so love to fly with you :) hope you're doing ok, so glad to see you are writing, and so prolifically :) will endeavour to catch up as and when I can, thought of you often, and will continue to do so, much love b xxx

Seren

17 years ago

lol ... BIG SMILE

I was going to wait till you got home but I thought no I would put it on and by the time you got back I will have worked all the bugs out of it , your words did inspire this one and now your home this ones for you ... MUCH love Jayne Hugz I missed my favourite Faery ;)

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