Candlewitch

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Reflections

in my cunning contemplation I see
the past as a jagged line
which sometimes went in circles
and often lagged behind

there were patterns that repeated
and footsteps sometimes faltered
but I wouldn't change a single step
not a chapter would I have altered

it is the things that I have done
and the places I lived to see
all those many things combined
that compose the art of me

longer are the days behind
a path I walked so free
shorter are the days, I find
that lie in front of me

now the future lies ahead
here branching can be found
should I take the low road?
or head for higher ground?

— Candlewitch, Jun 09, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

Seren

17 years ago

Cat ...

This gripped me and held me right till the last word ... damn you can write woman ... in this refection ? your so honest I love that about your writing , lovely , for you must be , to write such wonderful words ... there were patterns that repeated and footsteps sometimes faltered but I wouldn’t change a single step not a chapter would I have altered it is the things that I have done and the places I lived to see all those many things combined that compose the art of me Cat I love this one , these two stanza'a are perfect... bewitched and bedazzled I wish there were more stars to fall , for this one certainly deserves it ... I enjoyed this so very much .. Much Love Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

=)

Jayne, I am so pleased that this piece grabbed you! It is one of my more normal poems about everyday things, such as looking back and then and tempering those reflections with the "now." I wrote this one about a year ago, and was afraid to post it for fear of it being too mediocre. Then I decided that I should put it up for scrutiny and get help on it if it wasn't beyond help. I am pleasantly surprised by the reactions it has gleaned! Thank you for letting me know which lines you liked best. Always, Cat

poewriter58

17 years ago

Cat

Maybe it is just I but I stuck on "it is the things that I have done" what about Just( the things that I have done) just a thought otherwise as always classic writing from a fine poet Chrys

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Hey Chrys!

Always glad to have your comments on my work, Thank you! would it be better to make a contraction of the words, "it is" changing them to it's, in that line, or remove them altogether? Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 12 months ago

Cat …. Just wanted you to

Cat .... Just wanted you to know that this poem , I was telling my partner about it ,after asking me to read it , well , he simply loved it (hes a rough bush bloke and these are words of high praise coming from him) , just thought you might like to know that your reach is reaching far beyond the borders of neopoet ... beautiful poetry from a wonderful lady :) much love Jayne x

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Jayne,

I am tickled pink!!! Always, Cat

Janice Pearce

16 years 12 months ago

Reflections

I found this to be such a beautiful poem, but this last two lines didn't quite live up to the rest of the poem for me. Once again just an awesome write, [and this could be just me, so see what other feedback you recieve.] I will duck, if need be. _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Hi Janice

I felt like the last two lines were a natural conclusion in the direction of the poems journey, but I appreciate you giving me your honest opinion, please always feel free to do so. I find your advice is heartfelt and constructive. Always, Cat

barbsdad2003

16 years 12 months ago

What can ...

I say? It's a quality write. That's nothing new, of course, of course, for poet you. And I'm grateful for it. For you. That you are Who you are Chuck PS: You might want to fix (unless you don't) a particular word: as in shorter are the days, I find that [lie] in front of me and Now the future [lies] ahead

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Chuck

My wonderful friend, I only hope to be worthy of your praise. Thank you so much for the corrections! I have a little trouble with the tense of a word sometimes. Hugs, Cat

barbsdad2003

16 years 12 months ago

As to ...

Longer are the days behind A path I walked so free shorter are the days, I find that lie in front of me Now the future lies ahead Here branching can be found Should I take the low road? or head for higher ground? Do I detect an inconsistency here, unimportant though it may be? By inconsistency, I mean the earlier stanzas do not capitalize (except for I) anywhere. Then caps creep in. Should/ought angels, or me as their opposite, fear to tread here? Or not? Bear hugs, Chuck

barbsdad2003

16 years 12 months ago

Now perfect!

And so very pretty. Thanx for the writing ... and my pleasure. Chuck

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

LOL

I think the Caps can be attributed to a brain fart! I suppose I really should rework and add proper punctuation, too, because the two question marks that are there look kind of lonely. Thanks for bringing the mistakes to my attention as it helps me grow as a poet. (((Chuck)))

barbsdad2003

16 years 12 months ago

I like ...

your puncs just they way they are. Right now. As in presently. You know, this instant. More hugs, Chuckles

infinite_dwarf

16 years 12 months ago

Cat

=) You haven't lost a beat... How do you do it? ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Thanks Jess,

The idea just came to me... I think it is called being an old fart, LOL! Always, Cat

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Hi Blanka

Thank you for reading my poem, "Reflections." I think your poetry is so beautiful, too and I love the way you put it all together. Always, Cat

Electric Blue

16 years 12 months ago

Reflections

Cat All I have are reflections and what if's and if only? I wish I could create such as you my friend always Electric Blue

Candlewitch

16 years 12 months ago

Thanks

(((Maggie))) it is great to hear from you!!! Always, Cat

mand

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Cat

This is the kind of poetry I really like. It is well constructed, down to earth, appeals to people of every greed and it is very cleverly written, your a natural. well done. Mand

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Mand!

Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. I appreciate the input :) Always, Cat

pint_a_stoli

16 years 11 months ago

Candlewitch

Beautiful spin on, perhaps 'The Road Less Traveled'. I admit to be a sucker for rhyme, but it is so easy to sound repetitious or trap yourself with mundane points or even attach yourself to an overplayed cliche. I search for and I just love..absolutely love a totally unexpected eye opening, climactic ending. You've accomplished this and more. ..keep your door unlocked, I wish to see you again...:) PINT

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Hey Pint

I don't always get my e-mailed responses, that is why this reply has gone unanswered for so long. I just happened to be rereading this poem and found your message. Thank you greatly for sifting through my poems and reading. I appreciate your comments and am glad my poem hit home with you. My door is always open... Always, Cat

orgami

16 years 10 months ago

As a fan of Bob Dylan and fine poetry

touring around Neo tonight and found your poems and love this one I can hear the guitar being tuned the old folk wood harmonica on strap and frame the boot to keep time to tap love poetry like this yes high road or low road we never lose experience is beside us where ere we go Just turning older recent I muse now also and am enjoying the write such as yours Thank you

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Orgami!

What a wonderful surprise to have been visited by you. And such high praise as to compare my poem to Bob Dylan (whom I love dearly!) I'm so glad you liked this piece. Thank you for your comments and insight. Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Big Sis …..I had to

Dear Big Sis ..... I had to come back and read and I am more enchanted this time round ... beautiful work huni ... god you can write woman lol I said that way back when lol love and hugs Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Awwwww

That is so sweet of you! Love, Cat