paul

Jun 09, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Inner Child

Why do you cry this night?

Show the world that smile

Yes, the one that cures pain

Let your weary heart

Be soothed by these words

Of a hope left untouched

Know that no worry

Is worth the loss of a grin

Friend, let the better you

A moment to shine through

No need to live in a yesterday

When today is so much better

Put aside those dark thoughts

As you embrace a new day

Be the one who you want to be

Don't you worry about the fools

Set your wings and fly into the

Fairy tales that make life grand

Listen to your inner child's voice

As it jumps and yells of joy

A smile is all you ever needed

— paul, Jun 09, 2009

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Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

Yaaaaaaaaay paul

Wowie a happy poem!!!!!!!! I really like this one, the soothing kind of childish tone to it. I especially love the ending, the last five lines or so about fairy tales and such. Great imagery. You, too, keep smiling my friend, and continue to be the wonderful person you are. Peace, love n hugs Katie

weirdelf

17 years 1 month ago

Keep eating those cookies!

Great to hear a change of tone, paul, did you have fun writing it? Feel better? A word of to the wise tho, 'ware that second person. You carry it here sounding encouraging, engaging but it's too easy to slip into preachiness or (erk) inspirational. In fact the last line could be a bit dodgy. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.

frangipangi

17 years 1 month ago

thank you Paul

This is just what I needed, encouragement. I can remember to tap that endless resource, my inner child and be renewed. Thank you Paul, for giving hope. Well done master wordsmith, well done. Frang

infinite_dwarf

17 years 1 month ago

Paul

Nice to see that someone else's inner child has a Peter Pan complex like mine! I like the encouraging venue you decided to take. I smile in your general direction =) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd

poewriter58

17 years 1 month ago

Paul

Paul what if you were to just add a little bit something like friend let the better you come in give it a moment to shine through be the want you want to be ( I suggest leaving out the who) suggestion: add one more line to the end to complete the rhythm we all have an inner child I believe it is what keeps us alive. Never lose it Chrys

Lonnie

17 years 1 month ago

Very well-penned, Paul!

I felt almost like it was written for me! I do have a tendency to be rather down a lot, but things are starting to look up in my life, so this poem really felt appropriate and timely for me to read! Thanks for writing this!

Rett

17 years 1 month ago

Quite well done paul

Very optimistic as I try to be. That inner child needs to be close at hand. Sometimes the child is needed to return wonder to the world. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Skumpfsklub

17 years 1 month ago

Reserving comment 'til later.

This one wants study before I can write a review with any confidence. On first reading, I do NOT share the impression with previous reviewers that this is a happy, hopeful poem; it seems dark to me, and worth serious analysis. I'll get back to it when there aren't kids making thumpy racket upstairs. They distract. Perry

Jillian Botha

17 years 1 month ago

Sweetly presenting...

I truly enjoyed reading this piece Paul. It reminded me in a way of my daughter....and her outlook on the world. for some reason i hear her voice through you piece. thank you. I look forward to more of your work. you are a true talent. Regards Feebie (Jill) Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

Phx4ever

16 years ago

::: HUGE SMILE :::

Who better to tell this ...but, one who has lived it! I am proud of you! ;)

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