AS THE DAY UNFOLDS..

You chide me now with a
a worthy word.
Logic seems redundant -
the world remains absurd .

But remember this as the day unfolds
I didn’t choose the time
I never knew the place.

I merely felt the longing -
the need to embrace.
The moment held such magic ...
Memories
time will never erase.

— Bonitaj, Jun 09, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Hello

I think the title is good (and I'm really bad at titles, myself, lol) I like the language useage and the pacing carries right along. I like the theme, too. The ending makes me feel like I am missing something, such as a contention between the writer and the one the poem was written to. I enjoyed reading. Always, Cat

Bonitaj

17 years ago

As the day unfolds

Gee Cat! I feel so priviledged getting feedback from you! Thank you so much for your positive comments as well as your rating! :) Not quite sure I know what you mean by the last comment i.e. a contention between writer and poet? Do elaborate and maybe I can enlighten in the poem itself! Thanks again! Bonitaj

Lonnie

17 years ago

I think I like it!

Haven't read anything by you before, but if this is an indication of what you are capable of, I believe you'll go far! Nice 'Feel' to this piece, and wonderful inner depth! I am impressed!

Bonitaj

17 years ago

As the day unfolds

Lonnie! Art certainly adds to LIFE! or as the MEYER GOLDWYN MEYER symbol shows:the reverse as well : LIFE ADDS TO ART! Thank you for your rating! You're a sensitive man after my own heart :) Now watch this space! Bonita j

Bonitaj

17 years ago

As the day unfolds

Hi Cat! Tis I. I worked on that last line or two - see if that gives better closure now as I'm a lot happier too! Thanks again! Bonita j

Candlewitch

17 years ago

Wow

Much better! I'll change my rating to five stars! Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 12 months ago

As the day unfolds

"curious" Cat: Howzat for a new name? If it hadn't been for your probing the finer points of this poem - I might have just flunked my grades!!! But seriously I AM DELIGHTED!!! THank you so much - this is a 1st and I'm beside myself! 'WHEN THE PUPIL IS READY THE TEACHER APPEARS!" Thank you! Bonitaj

themoonman

16 years 12 months ago

Boni...

Hi, I see you've attracted attentions with your fine poeming... well written!! so I am not surprised... Richard

Bonitaj

16 years 12 months ago

As the day unfolds

dear dear Richard Do you ever sleep? does my mind not race? my happy heart weep? THank you! Bonitaj