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pixie dance

                                           
                            Once long ago,in a land far away
                             there was a forest of willow trees,
                             Where the pixies loved to play
                            some were a dazzling green
                             And others vibrant blue
                             they were purple,yellow,pink and orange
                             silver,gold and ruby red too
                             wow, their colors brightened the trees
                             It was such an amazing sight
                              the way they transformed the forest
                             When they shined throughout the night
                              They loved to dance and dance and dance
                              And sing songs from long ago
                              and when they were tired they would rest in the leaves
                              and just let their bodies glow
                              The pixies purpose was not as heroic
                              As saving the world from evil kings
                               or from dragons and trolls and evil witches
                               Or other nasty things
                               The pixies were there to bring joy and hope
                               With the simpliciaty of song and dance
                               to show the world that with a little hope
                                Even with the darkest hour, there's a chance
— greeneyes, Jun 07, 2009

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Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Hi Green eyes,

I like the very idea of writing a poem about pixies, but have to say that this sounds more like the beginning of a story than a poem (and you even say so yourself in your last words)... To fashion this into a poem, you would have to loosen your syntax a little and maybe add some more description of the pixies, to make them more "alive". As beginning stories go, it is a good one, but as a poem, it's not (yet). No offence, just an honest opinion. With poetic regards, Ink Dragon
greeneyes

greeneyes

17 years ago

thank you

Dear Ink, Yes im well aware it wasn't very detailed, it was something i came up with on the top of my head. I plan to work it as im not done with it. thank you for your comment it is aways welcome.