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On OneMorning85's "They Deem It ..."




On
One-
Morning-
85
's
"They
Deem
It ..."

Evocative. Suggestive.

Brimming.
Seething.
With potential.

For multiple meanings.

To.
Birth.
To.
Nurse.

To.
Sprout.
To.
Wean.

Perhaps to grow.

First.
To green.
Then.
To yellow.
Brown. Then.

To join with earth.

For birth.
Again.

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A collage of significances.
Hopping. Jumping. Running.

Of.
Thought.
Nuance. 

Prompts. Quiet.
Soft. Crying.
Gentle. Warm
Fuzzy. Laughing.

---

Its.
Very. Brevity. Lends.
It.
A. Noble.
Power. Strength.

A.
Biting.
Delicacy.

Comes.
Alive.
Organic.

---

Delectable. Marvelous.
The placement.

Of.
Its.
Words. 
 
---

Something ought to be done about it. 

---

Like.

Frame it.
And.
Hang it.

On.
The wall.

Near a busy door.

So.
Anyone. Anyone.
Anyone who passes
By it.

Can see.

And.
And. Then.
Then feel.
 

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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Thanx to ...

Thank you, OneMorning85. Her piece "They Deem It Unnatural" inspired this comment, here posted in a slightly tweaked form from the original to be found at her write. Chuck
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Quillsvein1

16 years 11 months ago

"a collage of significances"

indeed. though you only use single words and adjectives here, this evokes a mysterious, sort of in the "ether" mood. excellent, a wordsmith as always. GB
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bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Charles,

Holy! Some revolution brewing in your locale? Terrific. Words will not do you or this justice. Still, I will say, I am impressed, pleased, shocked. And please don't stop such art for any reason, rational, irrational or some mutant in-between. Brian
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Your best gift ...

to me: You inspire. Thank you for that. In another corner, I must fess up, my heart skips a beat when I see your name. You see, my son (Brian) died at 20, his life incomplete, unfinished, made dead and gone. It was in 1988. I still hurt from it. Thanx much, Chuck
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Chuck...

I had to go and check out the other poem before commenting, only because you mentioned it... love your wordings... properly placed... for strength and of course... beauty!!! onemorning's poem was very good, can see the inspirations that beckoned you... Richard
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Thanx, Richard

Appreciate your read/comment. I'd consider it a sad day if you ever change your profile pic. It's always a comfort seeing your face at that angle, with that look, under that hat, wearing those glasses. Sleepy, relaxed, alert. All of it. Yours, Chuck
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

I have to agree with

I have to agree with Quilsvein1 on this piece! The life cycle moves along at a rapid pace to its natural conclusion. I think this is why many people write, to show that they were here and to contribute the better part of themselves to future generations. A little slice of immortality. Always, Cat
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Glad you're ...

here, glad you've returned; hope you're here to stay. In your comment you've expressed well my motivations. Another would be as an attempt at further repairing/improving my brain. You know, the one that was so seriously damaged by head contact with concrete back in 1991. Still the residuals. They cling like leeches, won't release entirely. Improvement comes slowly, but convincingly. Early post-injury, and extending on for a couple of years thereafter, I couldn't even frame a proper sentence orally (of course the tongue didn't work, nor the brain) ... let alone in writing. I forwent professional therapy; instead designed my own. Writing's a highly significant part of my ongoing self-healing efforts. Thanx, Chuck
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Chuck

I didn't know about your accident. Was it from a motorcycle crash? (I have a few scars, myself, from my motorcycle driving days.) I love the way your mind works and the peotry it produces! (hello to Buster) Hugs, Cat
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Thank you

I was then a bit overweight. Not gross, mind you, but, yes, by my standards overweight. Played some tennis, took lessons, hoping to gain fitness and perhaps the lapse of a few pounds. I ran for a hard-hit ball, made the hit, but tripped over my own feet, and fell ... I was taken to Emergency. Who said they---their machines---could find nothing wrong. But ... I knew better. Oh, did I! I still know better. And did the moment I struck the tennis floor. Knew I'd lost something, that my brain had damage. Irretrievable damage. I got my self up, walked to the bench at the side of the court, sat down. And wept, mourning my loss. Feeling my loss. A friend took me to the hospital. Nothing, they said. And then they billed me. Oh, yeah. Nothing. Sure. It's been a long, long struggle ... but I'm here. I'm practicing. Exercising my mental works. Having fun (some would say too much), actually. Hugs right back, Chuck
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Buster ...

loves being noticed/acknowledged. However unfortunately, I'm on a ten-day visit with my daughter, Barb, in Phoenix. And though Buster can hear me at home by phone, it's just not the same as passing a message to him in person. He's one helluva happy duck. And a wonderful, wonderful person lives under those pearl-white feathers. Thanx, Chuck
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

=(

I am so sorry about your accident, but so glad that you are with us. There are times when you make my day. Always, Cat