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as below so above




as
below
so
above


a reaching carp's pout
dimples pooled smooth surface from
below; swallow in ...

flutter flight scoops her
just cut of the stream's water,
so frets the air side

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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Chuck,

you are a true master of evoking images with just a few words, and when I read your pieces, I often feel like watching a juggler. I can only sit and stare in awe, wishing fervently that I could do it, too. Yours, ~Nina
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Hey!

Your profile pic's got the material for it: a happy dinosaur glancing past the corner of her left eye, nearly lost under a too large fireman's (fireperson's?) hat, fire hose flaring, hands gripping oh so tightly ... A haiku/senryu begging to be writ. And it's so much fun. As my preacher father would say, if you're happy doing something and there are people in the world who're unhappy, then you're just being selfish. I guess I still rebel at heart---since I'm happy doing haikus/senryus. And do I feel selfish doing them. But only coz I'm happy. Thanx, Chuck PS: I should qualify the "haikus/senryus" per my context: A number of parameters beyond what I follow control the fully proper writing of them. I pay attention only to: that it be in present tense, that it's something I see ... or hear or touch or feel, smell ... (any or all the foregoing), that my lines are three for each, that my syllables per line run 5-7-5, and in that order. I avoid ending a line with an a or the. (These self-imposed dicta are rigid with me (which tends to keep it simple); some rules allow a certain amount of flexibility for the purer fans of the discipline who insist on adhering to the greater whole.) Working within a tight frame/box like that requires a careful crafting. And if a subject's particularly complex ... and I manage to capture it quite well in those few lines (and with those few/that many syllables) ... I can go home hands in pockets whistling something merry. My father'd be ashamed of me. But I live with it. By gosh. Somehow.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Psst, Chuck!

It's a dragon, not a dinosaur. One of my childhood heroes, Grisu, the little dragon who wanted to be a fireman - against all odds, against the judgement of his father, who kept telling him that dragons were supposed to cause fires, not to put them out. And I guess it would be my mum who would be ashamed of me, but I live with it, too. Somehow. And sometimes on purpose. Yours, ~Nina
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barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Is there such ...

a thing as a dragon/dinosaur hybrid? You know, one that's been high bred? A high-bred hybrid? Seems like that might be the case. I know, I know, you call her a dragon. Well, OK. (And probably purebred. Or thorough-?) Thanx for the info. It (always) helps to be informed. Yours, Chuck
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

There's Urmel,

another childhood favourite, but it (?) was supposed to be the missing link between dinosaurs and mammals, no mention of dragons. Sorry, Chuck. I have not encountered high-bred hybrids of that kind yet. But who knows what life may be holding in store for us? A chuckling Chuck, presumably, but then, it might be a dinosaurdragon. Yours, ~Nina