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Oct 10, 2011
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Untitled Musings
If the day
contemplated a year
then,
I have lived lifetimes
in an hour.
if a moment
could have moulded me,
it was this one
when our atoms danced
at first contact,
the static rubbed
at uncomfortable,
I felt the sting that said
‘stand sharp’
I watched the blue
of your eyes
cloud with a storm,
your fingers twitched
as I unfolded my wings,
burnt, torn and scarred,
you raised your hands
and with the balm of your palms
my wings were bandaged
soothed
healed
I now soar
as you watch
I fly the tempest
that in your eyes spreads,
now I ride the lightning
embraced in a thunderclap
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Timbo
14 years 5 months ago
Beautiful write, from someone
Beautiful write, from someone very talented.
Hope you are keeping well these days,
take care,
Tim
raj
14 years 5 months ago
JayCee
where were you?..welcome back ...nice to read this one....why did you get stuck up with a title? will keep tab on this one to see what title you come up with...i will scratch my head too and see if i can come up with something...
much love..