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Crawling In The Realm of Shadows

The different stages of my life, has
been walking in the realm of shadows.
In the past few years the burden I bolster
on my back, is slowly bulldozing me
to my hands and knees.

Lose of hope oozes through the cracks
of my heart. My heavyhearted soul has
fallen victim to this arduous cargo,
depression. The kaleidoscopic phantom
of dark cones are getting darker as time
passes by.

Now crawling in the realm of shadows,
my hands and knees decorated in scarlet
red blood. Shadows change to wickedness.
The blackness is the deepest tinge of shadows.
I have recognized, that I will be crawling
through this madness for the remnants of
my life.

There is no way out of the realm of shadow!


— Pixee, Jun 02, 2009

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Tink

17 years ago

Hey Pix

By far this is the strongest piece I have read yet from you. Your language is strong and i love the pinch of positive in the third stanza. Good job! Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
Pixee

Pixee

17 years ago

Thank you

I appreciate your comment. It is encouraging for me. I worked on that from my heart. Thank you again. Take care and I'll read you later. Peace, Pixee
Geezer

Geezer

17 years ago

I am much encouraged....

I am much encouraged by the progress you have made. You have written a dark piece here and I think you well on the way to being a really good poet.[only two minor things]:the first is, you should have used 'loss' instead of lose,and cones 'is' getting darker,rather than 'are'. Minor stuff! Congrats on a great piece. Gee.
Pixee

Pixee

17 years ago

Thank you

Thank you for your encouragement. I appreciate your critiquing my poem. All of ya'll helping me in reading my poems and telling me things needing improvement has made me open my eyes even more. I put more of myself into each poem I ink. Thank you so much!! Take care and I'll read you around. Friends, Pixee
Pixee

Pixee

16 years 12 months ago

Thank you green eyes

I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. Thank you for your comment. Take care. Pixee