(Persistence) The Pest

Been missing you for a while... good to see you back and posting a piece like this... very good to see you and your poetry... Richard

Ive never had the pleasure of reading your words I think you might just be a witch you wove a spell and this drew me in love and light Jayne x :)

try as i might i cant see anything here that doesn't work beautifully. Sounds like she is a woman of few words and he does not possess the true key to unlock her, so can only try the bait of juicy gossip. But will that work i wonder lol? Great to see you back with us Cat darling and hopefully we can all benefit from your many different persona and engaging thoughts and words again. My best wishes to Edge and the rest. Love K

work, this. What did you think of my title? I think the title needs a little life ... though as is it's totally accurate as to the content of the write. You've recounted here a failed series of attempts by a person prone to bitterness in the end ... and then a justified taking of vengeance. I'm not sure I like my suggestion much better, but here it is: A Bitterness at Length Justified (too wordy, I think) How was my language use? Beautiful, clear, spare. Can't say enough good things about it. What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing? Perfect (but then what do I know about perfect?) How does this theme appeal to you? Oh, yeah! How was the beginning/ending of the poem? I couldn't possibly write them any better. And thanx so much, Chuck

Natter or matter? I told you how to correct any errors that need be. in a reply Good to see you writing again Is this an Edge poem? Chrys

title possibilities come to mind: The Pest A Promise of Harm Inappropriate Pressures A Failure to Read Obsession Oops! I said a couple, didn't I? And here I've listed, by my count, five. (Sorry about that.) Chuck

Glad to see you back, and posting such a beautiful piece. Keep going Cat![Ambivalence, for a title?] Hugs, Janice ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Wo What a welcome back . Congratulations on making the spotlight Chrys

hi! i think you blend the tones and the voice inflections rather well. this is a moving poem the title falls a little flat , though it says what the poem is about rather well rhythm can be improved in just about any poem, an endless effort, the opening line and the last line are both sporting too much effort, i mean flow with your words, don't try too hard, you write fine. I am new here , i hope it is okay to be honest with opinion, i would appreciate the same for my poems , if i get to write any. poets block you know :(

Hi Cat! Have just read through your poem again and again and it is so good! It captures that thrilling urgency of the "pick Up" which never really happened! You go girl! Thanks Bonitaj

A wonderful write & completely deserving of Spotlight here, I hope to read many more now have discovered this precise & amply emotive work.~ Anni ~~~ "The moment one gives close attention to anything, even a blade of grass, it becomes a mysterious, awesome, indescribably magnificent world in itself" Henry Miller

it has been said by others here: A wonderful poem! You have crafted a beauty here. Whenever I read one of your pieces, I can see images, which I regard as proof that a poem "works" (as Keith has put it). Yours, ~Nina

is all, said Rilke! and persisted you have in this curious little art form. what i love here is the narrative flow which turns the reader's head, as though one is unable to look away; i may be wrong here, but the image i had was of a man desperately trying to get a bit of gossip from the woman in the poem. right or wrong, great job!

A welcome home hug to you. The poem is engrossing and it took me, unsuspecting, around a corner. I love when that happens. Thank you. ~A "You begin saving the world by saving one person at a time; all else is grandiose romanticism or politics." Charles Bukowski

So nice to have you back, and you didn't miss a beat with your work. I wish I could have been here to see it in the spotlight, but hopefully a belated congrats will do. :~) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "So I open my door to my enemies, and ask could we wipe the slate clean? But they tell me to please go fu** myself; you know you just can't win" - Pink Floyd