Ancient Moon Dust Black

This write was so deep in pain of not being, it even cut me, I am not sure if this is not a reflection of some feelings you have at the time of writing. To comment on poetry is sometimes a hard task, as in those few lines are paths that are walked by others, in this one it gives me a feeling of being lost and not being able to see or feel past the night we all sometimes are left in, forgive me if I am wrong , that is why it is so hard to comment. I wrote a poem to someone once and it was because... Believe Comes the dawn, when all the things of your yesterdays will mean That today is the first day of life's journey for you Being close, being lost, reaching out for what seems an age Touching flowers yet not having to pick one till that dawn Will make that final flower so wonderful to hold Do not fear to feel things before that dawn To have lived in yesterday only makes you see More clearly the things you need to see When the time comes I hope that I can be Within a small part of your yesterdays That will make the dawn more beautiful Just for you. You see there are things we need to wait for, not rush to be disapointed and sometimes crushed by others, that have no feelings, or are not aware of how we feel. Young Lady the dawn will be there soon if not already. Yours Ian.T

I can only say that you have written another fine piece Katie, and await the new dawn with the setting of the ancient black moon. Gee.

i love the imagery in this poem...in it, i not only see the desparation, fear and depression of the victim, but also the dawning of a new awakening, a new beginning, that, with the release of the pain, the blood, will come empowerment to start anew. very good write and release. Mike. :D

met those that tortured and read about them lived with the victims grew up with it close A great write Katie as always Loved the moon reference the black blade Neopoet has a lot of darkness our way of letting it out i guess stretching old wounds on scar tissue

This poetry has some excellent lines. I see you used some different crafting techniques here, and it gives the poem an angle that I haven't seen much of in your work. Overall, just wonderfully laid out, and all while being expressive without sounding forced. very nice write.