paul

May 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Unexpected

Sorry, but I had a change of heart

Mr. nice guy chose to depart

How do you like me this day

Now that I put my smile away

You should be proud of me

The man you wanted I will be

Pen shows no mercy this night

This time I will take on the fight

Keep feeding me your denial

I wont need a lawyer in this trial

For I am already paying the price

My crime was being Mr. nice

Come and don't you shed a tear

This heart you will learn to fear

Filled with anger and so much rage

Emotions pour slowly on this page

Put your hands together for what you built

A little too late for tears and feelings of guilt

This is not how it was supposed to be

Now would you look at what you did to me

Don't look away it's the man you desired

For those who care my good will has expired

I'm only the man you once rejected

I bet this outcome was never expected

— paul, May 28, 2009

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Favorite Poets: Cavafi, Sylvia Plath and Neopoet as a whole.

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Critiques

Rett

17 years ago

Yee hah!

Now this one shows the angry paul and it is good. Pout them emothions out man! Excellent, the flow was wonderful, not one stutter when I read it out loud. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

IKnowNoBox

17 years ago

Pow..

Right on target, why do those who press buttons get "spooked" when something goes "boing"? In ink, Dabbler

Lonnie

17 years ago

Good for you, Paul!

I believe this is the first time I've seen anything you've written and I must say, I like what I see! You depict so eloquently what it's like to go through a major personality change that one actually sees it happening! Great job, my friend!

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Yaaaaaaaaaaay Paul!!!!

Well, we talked about this one earlier...I love the general attitude of the poem of (quote Bon Jovi) "And when the world gets in my face, I say, Have a nice day". Great write paul, just the kind of attitude you need these days. Hehe. You're doing great paul, keep it up. Remember-you rock! Peace n Love Katie

pint_a_stoli

17 years ago

PUT THESE WORDS TO RAP OR

PUT THESE WORDS TO RAP OR HIP HOP AND I THINK YOU'LL GO PLATINUM. IT ACTUALLY HAS AN 'IN YOUR FACE' BEAT TO IT. THIS IS WHAT POETRY SHOULD DO...DRAW AN EMOTION. WHETHER THIS PIECE WAS RIDDLED WITH SARCASM OR REVENGE, ITS KICK ASS. NICELY DONE PS. IF U PUT THIS ONE ON A RAP CD, I GET 10% ROYALTIES FOR THE IDEA. PINT

weirdelf

17 years ago

It's great to move on,

but this poem still rings of being the victim to me, the line Now would you look at what you did to me is a dead give away. Your style and wordcraftsmanship are excellent but the bitter aftertaste leave me leaving a three, sorry, I do want to honour the great strides you have made in your art, but these latest works do not give me that certain je ne sais quoi that makes me want to read more, cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.

docmaverick

17 years ago

On the Other Hand....

...it sounds more, to me...that YOU have an intended victim, so really, it works from that stance. You don't come across as the victim, but rather the soon to be Victor. Bravo ! doc.