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MY DREAM

MY DREAM

When the day ends
And safety surround me
My true face
Is alluded out
For a night to breath

In that day
So much has my face seen
The truth
The evil
The love
My face knows in me

This face is under control
My eyes are open
But soon  my sleep
Will close

A sleep , my true face can breath
And unleash
My fears
Into what I love
And what I need  

As I dream
Is a ride,  though  broken scene
Some are clear
Others are beyond  to see 

When I awake
Those dreams
Can’t take shape 
The scenes ,dreamt  
By me
Will try to make
 my new day clean


— press, May 26, 2009

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poewriter58

17 years ago

Press

Are you sure you want to use "alluded" here as this means referred to indirectly perhaps you meant allowed? may I suggest eliminating some of the faces for example In one day so much I have seen This facade is under control In sleep being can breathe As I dream A ride ( this word is may be supposed by the reader as you are speaking of your dream in the first sentence) As I tell everyone in my comments these are mere suggestions, to be used or not Chrys