I Breathe Fire

Excellent i agree with snake.......one of your best! has love turned into a dragon? hahaha again...excellent stuff Bosscombat

"That's a sex poem." I like that you are still moving in this stylistic direction. There are lots of pulling words in this work, such as, an unasked question draping itself over my needs Really great! There is something above sexy when women choose to be a bit "naughty" (Olya's word - she does have others that are more sooty). I will say that "lava" is one of the words on the over used list, especially in sexy love/lust poems written by women (Words that women avoid include viscus, clammy). My own approach is to consider antonyms and opposites prior to settling on a word. I look forward to the continuation of this style. Adieu, bjp

and beautifully subtle and arousing. The form and style you have used here are really good i must say. So how might one improve on perfection lol? Well for me the first line doesn't really work that well. If you want to have a Greek allusion why not the mystery of Greek fire which would seem very appropriate lol. I think you might want to either say "a cyclone of want" or "cyclonic want" both for sense and for flow. Finally, the repetition of "need" in the lines below, having also used it in the verse before, is perhaps too much: "A need for air overcomes sense reason reigns in need" Perhaps "Hunger for air overcomes sense"? Who knows, a quick few tweaks and a re-read might result in a replay lol. Love K x

It's apparent you're havin' way too much fun. Something my father always cautioned me about. Admonished that if I'm feelin' happy when others aren't, then I'm bein' selfish. A sin if there ever was one. That he was a preacher/minister lent weight to his moral assertions. And there were many such assertions/proclamations. Too many for counting. Pardon me---and apologies to your husband---for applauding here. Thanx, Chuck

My daughter & her partner have been together for 18 years; why fix it if it aint' broken? btw, eroticism is nascent from what is ever *unbroken*.... thank the Gods!!!! many smiles & hugs of love, ~A "No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment of punishment." Article 5 of the Universal Declaration of Human Rights.