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Past present and future

Young  
 
We reap what we sow, improvising as we go,
hardly able to keep hold to what little we know.
Telling our folks, that we just wanna smoke,
no matter the consequences they can invoke.
Can't they all see, I  just long to be set free,
showing the world what it means to be me.  
What if I just wait and leave it up to random fate,
imagining if it might be ok for my dreams to deflate
Do I take a pass, falling in line with the human mass
knowing I might throw my chance away, like trash.
In the future will I rejoice, or regret my young choice?
Left to always wonder what happened to my voice.
 
Mature
 
We reap what we sow, improvising as we go,
confident of all of the little things we now know
Now we are folks, who still wanna little smoke
just to spite all the consequences it may invoke.
Now I can see, and have learned to live free.
I  showed the world what it means to be me.
Never could I wait, or leave it up to random fate.
or just stand by while all my dreams slowly deflate.
I did not take a pass, or follow the human mass,
or justify throwing my dreams out like trash.
No longer fearful to rejoice, in my young choice.
And I am here to tell you I now know my voice.
 
Aged
 
We reap what we sow, improvising as we go,
now aware of how very little we ever did know.
Now grand folks, who still don't mind a smoke,
But no longer abiding the consequence it may invoke
On the horizon I see, what it really means to be free.
Having shared with family what it means to be me.
I now wait, never again to dread my earthly fate,
knowing the time will come when I must deflate.
Never did I pass, choosing to care for the human mass,
realizing that no one deserves to ever feel like trash
Grateful to rejoice, that I owned my young choice,
proud to say that I always honored my inner voice.
 
Julie
 
D.D.
 
5-23-2009
 
Just little ole' me bending and manipulating my verse to my will:-)
— DawningDaytripper, May 25, 2009

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Julie you have reaped what

Julie you have reaped what you've sown with this little gem and this line " And I am here to tell you I now know my voice. " Says it all you've found your voice sing loud and strong well done huni :D Love J x x
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years ago

Hey Julie,

The repetition of the stanzas, with its evolving theme, that shows the growth of the human nature, at different stages of a life, was very well done! What a great idea!! Repetitious, but incredible interesting as I continued to read! Wonderful job in its creation! thanks, Eddie
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Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Julie,

this is such a great idea! It hits home with me, as I have recently discovered my first white hair (Argh!) and am (again) struggling with my smoking habits. So 100% on the content. You might want to smooth it out a little more, some lines were slightly out of flow. But I know how hard that can be, and am awed that you made it rhyme so well. Yours, ~Nina
Geezer

Geezer

17 years ago

Reads like a rap....

It would be real interesting to hear this as a rap! I can just hear it now! Julie,the "Dawning Day Tripper" with her newest folks! Give it up for the rapper of the year! YAAAAAAAY! Gee.
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Hannah illiterate

17 years ago

Magnificent!

Where the hell has this wonderful poem been hiding? I love it. I cannot even handle the pure amazing and interesting talent and genius of this poem. Thank you for blessing the world with this marvelous piece of art. always yours, H.B.C
Mark

Mark

17 years ago

er..

this sucks... wrote that title in fourth grade Mark "some things change, some things don't"