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Goodbye;

Am i welcome?
Maybe not...
if i am,
then whats the plot?
Fairy tale,
of the moon,
crescent hook,
in the sky,
beautiful and bright,
don't sink in light!

Scarlet rose,
you died too soon,
just like my crescent moon.
Bending down,
needing waters taste.
Its like I'm here my dear,
but your no longer near.
I come to see,
you suddenly die from need.

Why ,oh why, did you leave me?
Oh yes, to see me,
You saw then you left,
Before I died you theft,
robbing my heart,
then breaking.
Good bye my moon,
you and my rose,
both left too soon.

— ANC1996, May 25, 2009

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Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Ooooooooooo Adri

Even upon reading this again, I have to say it's still your best. The images of the rose and the moon just go beautifully together. You just missed capitalizing some I's, but your punctuation was great. Lol. But definately a piece of sorrow and pain. I love it. Peace N Love Katie
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years ago

Thnks Guys!!!

Oochies,I forgot about the i's! Lol;But thanks Yah both rock! PEACE OUT!! Adri<3
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years ago

Really cool, jaunty poem…

Really cool, jaunty poem... like your take on *goodbye*... ~A "No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment of punishment." Article 5 of the Universal Declaration of Human Rights.
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

ANC

I loved this one I liked your title .. This is really lovely ... Only thing " I died you theft" ... it doesn't feel right to me but I have a suggestion maybe ? You saw you left I died no threat Its only a suggestion .. still a beautiful piece well done !! Love J x
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years ago

Thanksss;

Thanks for the suggestion Seren! Yall rockk:D PEACE OUT! Adri, ;)
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years ago

:]

Thankyah for the suggestion.Your right...never thought of em' that way! Ps-Adrianna is how yah spell it :D lol Oh && i like the whole 'Blood and BEst wishes' sounds cool! Peace! Adri,