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The Runway's wings

Walking down the runway,
the wings on your back,
the secret you tell,
will treat Victoria well,
the wind in your hair,
the heals on your feet,
all an addition,
to the pressure,
your famous of coarse,
and pretty is too short,
all these models,
you walk in before,
feel the same,
but a little bit more lame,
spread the secret,
tell the world,
cause its everywhere,
in Victoria's world.

— ANC1996, May 22, 2009

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Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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yenti

yenti

17 years ago

Runways wings

Had me going there, as I use to work on Aircraft, but then got the feeling there were some slim ladies invoved, This piece seemed a little disjointed maybe an edit and resubmit would help, sorry one of the others can talk about structure. But keep on putting them on stream,Yours Ian.T
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years ago

yeah, I got it was about Victorias Secret

and it works really well, somehow I think you could be a bit more scathing. What makes them lame? You mention their sameness. Objectifying women? The culture of anorexia? Still, it stands as it is, cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.