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paul
paul
May 21, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Brutal Love

Against the mistress of love
No army stands a chance
The strongest of hearts decay
Courage is a soldier left weaponless
From her there is no safe haven
Nightly she crowds weak minds
Her laughter is almost taunting
Slowly she pierces her victims
Beware of her capturing smile
Pay no mind to her luscious lips
Forget her angelic innocence
She promises all that is heavenly 
Then she lets you slowly burn
No currency can persuade her
A criminal with no prison sentence 
— paul, May 21, 2009

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Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Yaaaaaaaaay Zeus

Again, again, Zeus. You just keep coming out with brilliant poems. This one definately goes with my fave from you. It's simple and beautiful. Another splendid write. Love the imagery, the army, the mistress of love, the capturing smile. Has a whimsical, romance feel to it with a hint of brutality, as the title would suggest. Definately one of your best ones. Peace N Love Katie
Blue_Halcyon

Blue_Halcyon

17 years ago

Kewl

Hey Zeus, I like this one and can definitely relate to it. The only complaint I have is the ending is kind of abrupt, and leaves you hanging in an unresolved sort of way. I was thinking maybe the last line needs to be reworded just a bit, like "I am her criminal and her prison sentence has no end."