You...us...forever

You....us....forever Sitting here with you on this sunny daysmiling with bright laughter in your eyesnext to you as you tease me and we playnever the need to try and spin any lies. Footprint's to mark our trail, now behindboth walking through sand dunes of timeleading us to all we might ever finda whole universe now yours and mine. Satin Scarlet fading to waves of Azurefrothed with sprays of milky glitter wept giving way to our love deep and yet pure glinting the promise you've always kept! Ebony seeps in to our secret tryst The luckiest pair to ever exist. Julie D.D. My Hubby's Poem, I wrote it for him. I have been a little dark for his taste lately, mine to. Hope you all enjoy, everyday with my husband is a joy for me. Even when he is a butt head, I just don't tell him those days!This is a Shakespearean sonnet, 14 lines, 10 syllables per line, ABAB CDCD EFEF GG my second Sonnet!

— DawningDaytripper, May 18, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

Critiques

Seren

17 years ago

D.D.

Oh my Julie !!!!!!!! You shine so bright here and your hearts singing .... Beautiful sensuous awesome read its a shame the stars only go to five for this deserves more .. funny thing is this is only your second sonnet .. Watch out your only just hitting your stride ;) Satin Scarlet fading to waves of Azure frothed with sprays of milky glitter wept giving way to our love deep and yet pure glinting the promise you’ve always kept! This is my favourite bit :) Such beautiful , beautiful words I really really loved this , in this one shine bright my friend .. Love and Light JayC x x

deelilah

17 years ago

Hi Julie

A very nice sonnet. I think you caught on very quickly. 'Sitting here with you on this sunny day smiling with bright laughter in your eyes next to you as you tease me and we play never the need to try and spin any lies.' I like that verse especially. Yours, Deelilah PS I like your new picture, though I would like to see the real person behind this variety of poems--sweet, dark, sad, happy, controversial, and etc.

Rett

17 years ago

Hurray, beautiful.

Well done on the sonnet Julie. That should make hubby happy as a frog in wet weather! *G*Totally enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Mark

16 years 1 month ago

Good going Julie

I'll remember this write. The marked structure always escapes me when I decide to give one a go ;) Now I know where to look it up and an uplift this poem is :) Thanks for the pleasure, Mark