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Lonely Arms and Empty Rooms

Watching them grow faltering each step
 knowing we'd part since the moment we met
  guiding and helping along their way
   coaxing gently when mind is in sway

     Grown to men I'm proud to call my own
      my girl child a blessing I already know
       Shes a shining young star and will go far
         we'll help with her journey me and her Pa

            I've sat and watched them grow from babes
             now walking alone on earths big stage
              I hope I've given them all they need
               I worry I missed that vital seed

                  As a parent we all do our best
                   trying to pass life's biggest test
                    there's only so much a mother can do
                     Never lose hope hold to that true

                        Flown from the coop they will have gone
                         I'll weep and sing the saddest song
                          Of lonely arms and empty rooms
                           Hoping their home again real soon ...

 

— Seren, May 18, 2009

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years ago

This is lovely Seren

The whole, its a good rhythm and wording, content and all. How sensible you are, I shall never know that wrench as I have never had children, but you express it well enough for me to imagine it. They will be back to see you often, you are good parents I think. Yours Ann of Norway
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Hugs Ann thank you so much

Hugs Ann thank you so much ... I have four children and a very proud mother I am .. Though my children arent babies anymore :( (I LOVE babies) LOL I sometimes wish I could turn the clock back and watch it all again like the watching of a favourite movie ... I have sung all my life and performed but nothing compares to being a parent of all the gifts god gave me the most precious was becoming a mother , they all have little quirks as they grow up all the little nuances that remind me of myself or their father .. I have three boys and about 20 adopted sons that continually hang round my house after school and at weekends and one daughter who I can proudly call my best friend .... My second son goes away to the army in six months .. so I guess it was with that in mind that this got writen .. lol 2nd but biggest hes 6'6 and still growing .. The saddest part of being a parent is in the letting go ... I have two left at high school and I'm savouring the last few years before they head off to uni ... So I guess im a little whimsical about them at the moment but all in all I am going to miss them when they do leave .... lonely arms and empty rooms a houseful I hope im a good parent but like anyone even parents make mistakes .. Ann im so glad you enjoyed this one to be honest I didnt expect a review of this one ... thank you :) Love and light Always JayC x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years ago

Those beautiful steps in life.

Not only did you arrange it in a sensitive way down the page (I didn't even manage to centre mine, I had them centred in my computer, a Mac, then they didn't like getting translated into your 'Windows' so there it was) but you made them into an image of steps, those going down with your lingering sadness and those going up at their striding out into the world, full of their parents love and guidance. It is they who are the lucky ones I think as such parents are the greatest gift of all. 'Choose your parents carefully' we say!!!! That makes ALL the difference to having a good life doesn't it? JayC and your partner. Yours with emotive feelings Ann of Norway.
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Ann

Ahhhhh you clever thing !! :D hugz I am so glad you picked up on the first line and the steps down the page and the steps going back up the other side .. Thank you so much for your comments I have wonderful children (who are far from perfect mind you haha) who spoil me rotten and make sure I always get a kiss goodnight or goodbye when they leave the house .. And yes my grown boys still hug and kiss mum in front of their friends (which to this day stall amazes me) hahaha .. I feel much loved by my children ... My partner is a wonderful man who has helped me bring up the kids even though they are not his .. Without his help and love along the way I would never have the children I have today .. With no doubt he was the best thing that ever happened to any of us .. I heard a saying once "It takes a village to raise a child" its very true I am blessed to have many friends who have enriched the kids lives one of them being another poet on this site bosscombat ... with such a rich array of backgrounds in our lives my children have had the best of many different worlds thanks again Ann much love JayC x x
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

D.D.

Thanks so much Julie ... It does get scary im 39 my children are 20 , 19 , 16 , 15 the last two are like twins they were born so close together lol ... I fought with my second son for a year to make him finish his higher studies LOL .. And it was worth all the tears (from me) the Its my life (from him) ... When he finished year 12 last year he came to me and thanked me for making him stay .. He is now getting ready for uni and the army and I couldn't be more proud of him hes been working since he finished school as well ... I am very strict with the kids but it is worth it they understand more now that all the boundaries I put up for them over the years were to guide and to keep them safe NOT because I wanted to control their lives There are times I give in against better judgement but so far my guardian angel has watched over them for me ... Unfortunatly you can't be with them every step of the way ... but you can make their first steps safe ones and make sure they understand how the world and people work .. thats all you can do and pray for the best .. Enjoy them while they are little they don't stay like that huni ... I am so glad you liked this one it was for all mum's with older kids leaving the nest .. much love JayC x x
themoonman

themoonman

17 years ago

JayC...

pleasing to the eye and a pleasure to read... We can't help but worry if we've done enough to help them, guide them for a safer journey... Richard
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Richard ...

Awww thank you so much ... You never do stop worrying do you ? I thought when my oldest turned 20 and started maturing that it would be less of a worry ... but I never have , it got worse ... I think you can only do your best Richard and unfortunatly they have to make their own roads .. As Julie said it's scary but we can't lock them in the celler can we ... can we ?? lol nice thought but they would kick my butt ... they are bigger than me now .. Love JayC x
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Silent Whisper…

17 years ago

Yay! !!! i read this one

Yay! !!! i read this one first !!! ...yehh thats right im special ! XD haha nah i love this poem mum its great...perfectly describes the love u show for all ur "kids" biological and adopted stragglers hahaha O:-) and i love how it slopes...gives it more to entice with it...insted of a book with no poictures...its like the sloping words help make a picture of u n ur kids so yeh...i love it :)
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

((((((((Hugz))))))))

LOL Bj ya crazy bugger ... and you are special ... Ed special lmao sorry couldnt help it ... You know me collector of strays , be they people or animals ... I only return the love given darlin ... And growing up essentially alone as my brother and sister were grown up , as you know I always wanted a big family well I have the family I dreamed of with some added extras included LOL and wonderful extras they all are ... All the people in our life enrich it everyday in everyway .. I wont say anymore ... As you know Jake joined the army today and im a tad teary at the moment im likely to cry (Again) .. kiss and hug You know your one of my favourite strays anyhoo ner ner ner much much love Jaynee x x x
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xaelz

17 years ago

touching

what a great poem... its so touching and meaningful..
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Xaelz ...

Thank you !!! I am so glad you liked it have really been enjoying your first couple of poems ... I havn't been well so I will comment on the second one just got out of hospital tonight so ill go see to that later I hadn't forgotten you ... love J