Betrayed

In this hour of need

To you I quickly turn

On my knees I fall

As I beg of you to

Stay by my lonely side

Like a weary traveler

I yearn for shelter

Stranded in the

Midst of a winter

That knows no mercy

Will you please offer

Me a simple conversation

Rather than betrayal

That I felt in her lips

Cursed by her tender

And Judas like kiss

Will you please open?

Your loving arms

Or will you watch

As my flesh slowly burns

— paul, May 14, 2009

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Favorite Poets: Cavafi, Sylvia Plath and Neopoet as a whole.

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Critiques

Tink

17 years ago

I'm impressed Paul

BRAVO! I thought this was full of that fear of being rejected that everyone hates so much, you captured that feeling well. I like this one paul. good job. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink

Morgana Tragic…

17 years ago

Yaaaaaaaaaay Again paul!!!

Like always, I love this one paul. You just know how to instill this emotion of loneliness and sadness in your poetry, and it's amazing. I just spotted a few punctuation errors, other than that it's great. Your question mark at the ending should probably be at the end of the last line, other than that I love love it. Keep writing, paul, you're doing awesome. Keep your head up and keep the faith, and remember that you are loved. Peace N Love Katie

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

Paul

Sometimes you just gotta let go, and get on with the gettin' on. A saddening, pain-filled write of a young man with his heart laid bare. Chin up, my friend. ---------------------------------------------------------------- "Until that ‘morrow render unto me That which is mine my stipend well deserved The fairest flower of your progeny Your sons, your daughters your hopes and your dreams The cruel consequence of your conceit" - Steve Earle

Mark

17 years ago

Heavy subject

It must not have been easy to write. I felt the impact. Mark