Guardian Angel

This is so very sweet Paul. Lovely imagery and description. There's a deep love for this guardian angel here. Very touching. ALways remember, my friend, you always have a guardian angel watching over you. You are never alone. Peace Love N Hugs Katie

I like this a lot. Well written and very emotional. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Well my views are probably known on the Guardian Angel side of life and beyond. This was an excellent write on that subject, and flowed so well, Yours Ian.T

Sitting here smiling. Wrote about my angel many times but this is most pretty. Mark

an amazing poem sir

As I was saying in chat, this poem was able to evoke a range of emotions from sadness, to hope, to putting a smile on my face. Anything that can do that gets an A in my book.... So you're gonna scurry on over and leave my work some love now, right? *chortles* Nice writing, SG. ~Jess K. --------------- - "Until that 'morrow render unto me that which is mine; my stipend well deserved: Your sons, your daughters, your hopes and your dreams, the cruel consequence of your conceit" -Steve Earle

and your poem has an enticingly soft flow which draws you in. A couple of the images felt a little cliched such as "to unknown galaxies" the "deadliest of diseases" and the "holiest of heavens" but overall i liked it. All the best Keith PS I think you meant "worst" rather than "worse"

I love the whole idea, and I have read the comments left for you by other readers. With that said and even after reading those wonderful comments, I am going to stick by my opinion. I do not believe you have given them the same idea you told me you were after. I feel the first three lines are vague. (What comes to mind when I read “Like autumn leaves You scattered away To unknown galaxies” I see a departure, and I wonder, is it the angel? Someone else, or, it could be an idea) You told me, was your innocence that is scattered, I think you should incorporate that into your poem. It gives your angel a deeper meaning for being there, I think. It shows a need. I really love the rest of the poem, for the sincerity of feeling genuinely happy this person has come into your life. It feels very spiritual, like a true friend, someone very caring and as you state, an answered prayer. The question at the end…a great ending! ‘You will never spread your wings’ true friends are for life Paul. Sometimes, they move in and out of our life, but, they are always there when we need them. Always Sincere, Tonya

I was stunned to see what you had written,Paul. You have such a beautiful work here. I wasn't sure about the last lines,the way they were put down. I would have put the question mark after [You will never spread your wings?]But after seeing everyone else's comments,think I may be wrong. A great write! Gee.

I love the last two lines, but i think maybe you are right.. just changing the placement of the question mark.. "Will you promise me that You will never spread your wings?" makes instead of a pause after that... a continuous though... Is totally up to you Paul... is lovely regardless. Tonya

Darling Paul I love you for this poem... except for the last line... may I give you a different perspective (I know you were conjuring poetic licence... literally), it makes me shudder that you would not wish for the one you love to spread her wings... Love MUST be free to fly & return only where it is warrented, no matter what kind of love it might be. Having lived many years with my wings clipped the last line of this poem had a devastating effect on me... I love it all the same, jsut think on my idea though. Imagine having wings & the one you love asking you not to use them?!!!! Remember that terribly cliche thing "if it comes back it was yours, if it doesn't it never was (so you have lost nothing). ~ Anni ~~~ "A loving person lives in a loving world. A hostile person lives in a hostile world; everyone you meet is your mirror." ~Ken Keyes, Jr.

beautiful... for me the cliches, as mentioned above, bring honesty to this piece (i will agree that worse should be worst) "Like autumn leaves You scattered away To unknown galaxies" amazing lines...and i also like the selfishness at the end...it is flattery in its true form... i actually teared up with this piece...first time in a long time i did that...thank you for this great piece paul!!! T_T <3 Emarie __________________________________________________________________________________ "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~heartbreaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

I read this a few days ago, but didn't have the time to comment. But this poem really drew me in and I even like the last lines the way they are ("Will you promise me that?/You will never spread your wings"), because I associate flying away with the spreading of one's wings. You address a cherished person with this poem, and your imagery evokes the picture of a fragile but powerful creature who you wish to stay and become your "guardian angel". Your word choices are really WOWs, I love lines like "Your presence crowds/The corners of my mind", to name but two of your beautiful lines. Cheers, ~Nina

That Was Beautiful. Please Look At Some of mine and tell me what you think.