Touched

You were no longer abstract to thought

Tangible

Like a rain shower

A born rhapsody

I am kindred to Oshun

You Sango

Cool snap fresh

Like a green bean

Not easily impressed

Lyrically you stole a part of me

If my years allow

Please indulge my curiosity of your "Muse."

Without being intrusive submit

Lepadah

Dedicated to C

Bring the cush.

— Lepadah, May 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: New York

Favorite Poets: Rumi, Gil Scott Heron, Felipe Luciano, Walt Whitman, Ginsberg, Kerouac, Neruda, Walker, Troupe, James Baldwin etc . . .list endless

Critiques

Cloudthings

17 years ago

sweet like an apple from the tree, fresh & leaving one sated & s

I really enjoyed this though it kept threatening to lose me for some reason, the point of it I mean, in the end it still feels a bit vague, but that might be my state today. Lovely use of terminology & space of rhythm... imagery was really sweet (I don't mean sweet as in cute & little girl with ribbons, I mean sweet like an apple from the tree, fresh & leaving one sated & surprised at how good a simple thing can be) Look forward to more from you Cheers~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

Lepadah

17 years ago

Re. Comment

It is a bit obscure. I love your critique and appreciate your insight very nice. Peace & 1 Lepadah