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Seren
Seren
May 10, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Broken Dream

A Broken dream
with tattered seam
hollow inside her
fearful night

In Solitary left
manchet with water
hearts engraved in
memorized torture

Serrature of time
tapestry the walls
torment never cease
suffering begone

— Seren, May 10, 2009

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

D.D

Sorry there was no more to the story this was a self portrait of a sort .. But thanks for taking the time to read .. I'll try to include a little more story next time .. Thanks again Love and Light JayC x
J

Justice

17 years 2 months ago

Spellbound

Hey hey - I really like this one. It does seem short but the brevity and rhythm make the words more powerful than they would be if it was much longer. Also it seems much like a spell to me which gives it that mysterious feeling. It makes me want to ask you to tell me what it means but then I also don't want you to tell me because then it would ruin the mystery and my own interpretation. Nice work.
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Jussie !!

I like this one too !! and when i get to newcastle I'll tell you in person what it meens ... I am so glad you like this one it wasn't easy to write had to edit a few times till I was happy with it ... Love and Light JayC x x
B

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

:)

short and sweet...awesome work. <3
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Do you like your women the

Do you like your women the same way Matt ?? hahahaha Just joking darlin LOL ... but im glad you liked this .. I wrote this a long time ago when well things weren't too flash in my life .. Love and Light Always Jaynee x x
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks for taking the time

Thanks for taking the time to read it and im glad you liked it .. I wrote this a long time ago and this one will forever more stay this way no edits no nothing .. I was how I felt at the time .. and shouldn't be changed as to change it would change the reality of the truth .. thanks again I didnt think anyone would like this one to be honest lol love JayC x
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

it is a beauty Jayne Chloe... Well done my darling Aussie friend

Yay, there you are at spotlit Evolution! & well done, I must have missed this one first time round, it is a beauty Jayne Chloe... Well done my darling Aussie friend. Well written & well worn (as in, you wear it well) Love & comfort to you~ Anni ~~~ "The moment one gives close attention to anything, even a blade of grass, it becomes a mysterious, awesome, indescribably magnificent world in itself" Henry Miller
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

lol … Didnt even know it

lol ... Didnt even know it was there ... Thanks its a personal write this one ... Never really expected many people to understand it but im glad you like it ... Take care Love and Light Jayne x
PN

Pen Name

17 years 1 month ago

Hey Seren

Good write... :) Amartya
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Amartya … By the way thats

Amartya ... By the way thats a beautiful name havent heard it before .. glad you liked this one its an old poem I wrote many years ago .. This is one that will never be edited it will stay as it is ... as it should be ... Describing a situation that I was forced into , this was written on the back of a cigarette packet and found not long ago ... Love and regard Jayne-Chloe

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